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My user there is 'Schloanruven'. Just check out the books I put a 'favorite' to in my profile. Feel free to explore there also, I can guarantee you that you can find a lot of good stories in there. The search settings are also more advanced than in this site also. So, more or less you can find the stories that are more in your preferences.
Hello. Webnovel is the last platform you would want to find stories that are up to standard. At most, only 5% of the stories here are up to par. And around 1% are the really good ones. So they are pretty rare. And if you find them, some are in hiatus or are inconsistent in updates. Me personally, my main platform for reading good stories is royal road. The authors there are way more professional in terms of skill in writing despite amateurs. But if you insist on this site, here are some of the few stories I could recommend from what I can remember. 1) The Hitting Zone (half_empty) 2) The Legendary Actor (Shallowman) 3) Legendary Hollywood Director (Shallowman) 4) Naruto: The Blind Swordsman (Veganmaster) 5) Reborn As Thor (Ghost_84) 6) Ghost of the Uchiha (T0x1n) 7) Holyjoker (This one is an author, he has a lot of really good fics) 8) MisterImmortal (This one is an author with a lot great fics too)
The idea is very sound but the execution is not up to par. Odin's character feels very off especially when the fic is written in monologue style. The way he speaks or internally process things does not fit with the character Odin. Even if he's a reincarnated one and merged with another reincarnator, it still feels off. The way he speaks and think feels more like a modern youth (childish). I think what went wrong here is that the author failed to separate himself from his MC (Odin). The MC's boons are also a problem. The MC is already a god and has meta knowledge, so the boons are very unecessary. It takes away the fun of being reincarnated since any challenge he will face will just feel forced since he already has everything. Those points and the fast pacing/wish fulfillment style doesn't help at all in the immersion to the story. It's not very immersive.
This thing suffers the same thing chinese novel and fanfiction suffers: great idea but bad execution. The only thing that got this fic a 3.2 from me is due to its great concept and update stability. I think those are the reason why this was rated highly by some aside from the spam ratings. The people from this site really love ideas with no context. Let's start with the character Design. I rated it 2 for trying. Every character is one dimensional even the MC. It's hard not to cringe at their dialogues and interaction. There's no depth at all. Even the narration and monologues are off. Its like reading a children's book. The narration and monologues feels like this; "Dugu Xin suddenly sensed murderous intent. He exlaimed 'What frightening intent.'" Redundant and badly structured. Now with the plot. I rated it 3. The plot development is passable. It could really work if not for the problem with the characters and characters interactions as I mentioned above. The plot development still follows the common style and elements the original story followed. And its okay. However, sometimes it tries too hard to copy the style of the original story and can be cringe. Simply it lacks the flavor of the author. The world background, I rated it 3. We already know most of the doulou planet. However, we also know how vast and deep it can be. It was not projected in this fic. I only gave it a 3 for the fact of the knowledge of the world I have of the original story. Otherwise, it would have been lower. Lastly for the writing quality. I gave it a 3 because it is readable. It is readable but still mediocre. The spelling errors are few and the grammar is passable. However, just I have mentioned before, it feels like reading a children's book. I feel like this problem is more on how it is structured. It's not even amateurish, it's more like the wrtiter doesn't even know what they are doing in terms of how it is structured. So, overall I rated it is a 3.2. It still passed but needs a lot of improvement.
You know what? I'll give you 5 stars just for the respect I have by being a real one. What I mean about that is that you are in the right track in becoming a decent author. Now time and experience will be the determinants if you'll become one or become something better. To clarify what I mean about being in the right track is that no systems and no incessant horny shit. While years ago the "system" themes were deemed creative, right now it has just become a pathetic excuse for uncreative writers to supplement their incompetency to write a decent plot with resources only within the materials. It has destroyed the uniqueness and originality of writers. It's all the same repeatitive bs. While it may gain them popularity now with the underaged minds in this site, it will not bring them far. Their ceiling will just be a popular amateur writer in this site provided that he/she can reach that ceiling which I really doubt, and never last enough to go beyond that or find his/her own style of writing. I hope you do stay away from that and learn & grow the hard but right way. P.S. I'll write my actual review about this fic later when it has already a decent amount of chapters. This is just an encouragement for the couple of writers who tried doing things differently from the trend of themes in this site.
Yeah it's dumbly forced. Gran Torino wouldn't ever expect that over a child, heck nobody would.
From the first 5 chapters, I think the fanfic is a translation(?). I can't be sure since it was never stated that it was? The story itself is interesting, the idea of it to be more specific. A blackbeard SI. However, the way it is written and structured just screams that it was from a chinese author. Not that there is wrong with being one. BUT it was not spared from some of the typical cliches chinese authors often have with their writing style. So there's that. Now with regards to its translation, it was traslated well being it is reasonably readable. From that I mean it has a sense of grammar, so you can read it peacefully. The spelling mistakes on the names of the characters and weapons on the other hand were a lot, which can be fixed pretty easily if the translator/author took the time to do a double read before and after uploading it. There were mistakes which don't make sense to me how you can mistook them like whitebeard's hair being blue?? mistooking whitey bay for weevil? It would be understandable if the fic was transalated, but in the case it is not then I'm not sure if we are reading/watching the same One Piece.
I thought the knives name were Inferno and Thunderfang?
bruh whitebeard aint blue-haired and who tf is "titch" hahahaha
I don't understand. What did he got from all of this?
Yep, true. Also how does Crobat know that Alex has or can have the capability to revive someone. He is not aware of the system right? No matter how amazing or smart Alex is in the eyes of his pokemon, revival is something impossible to them. It is more so to them as they are very familiar with the law of the jungle. It does'nt make sense to me how can Crobat insinuate that Alex can plan someone's revival.
No one's complaining about the work here (I like the fic bro, chill). Its just a discussion where I'm suggesting how the gas-gas fruit is more OP when used right than smoke-smoke fruit. But bruh smoke is not solid in gas and vapor is not liquid in gas either. Smoke is still gas with solid particles (soot or particulate matter/materials with incomplete combustion) and Vapor is gas (gaseous state of water but still completely gas with no liquid). That is why I pointed how gas-gas fruit might be better since it encompasses them all.
Nah the gas-gas fruit is more powerful than the smoke-smoke fruit since it covers all types of gases not the limited gases contained in smoke. Sadly, it wasn't used right in the anime even though the user was Caesar, a scientist himself. And there's no fic yet that showed how OP it can be. I mean galaxies, nebulas, stars, or pretty much most of heveanly bodies are made up of gas.
It's pretty discouraging to be honest.
I say it's a good novel because of the author's tenacity to see the novel through and backed by quiteadequate skills. However, the same as most of the concerns in the review section, the MCs have inconcistent character designs. It just feels weird how they seem to be bendable to the view of the current time. Like apart from their modern knowledge, they don't reflect any modern behaviours or ideologies from our society. They feel as if a character from the 19th century suddenly receiving engineering knowledges rather than someone from the modern society that tranmigrated to the 19th century. And this defect in their designs shows how they have weak views or will coming form the modern era when they became massive simps for Carolone and Amelia. Even if Amelia wasn't a spy to their comapny or Caroline is a reincarnated individual, bruh you can't be that naive of accepting Amelia to your company when both you(MCs) and Caroline are trying to create legacies that both you only have. They don't have the sense of wariness one would expect from someone coming from the modern era who have seen it all.
As much as good the updating stability of this novel is, there are already a lot of problems in the earlier chapters. However, I will just focus on the 2 most glaring problem. The first I will address is the technical aspect. The spelling errors in the novel are negligible, but the grammar quite unsatisfactory. It is readable compared to other stories here on this site, but I don't acknowledge such stories as proper novels. At first, the grammar seems alright. Passable with consideration that this might be on e of the writer's first stories and I really thought it would improve along the way, but it just got worse. It started with just the misuse of "I'm", wrong verb tense, then to whole grammatically incorrect sentences. The second problem is that the characters aren't fleshed out properly. The MC was basically inserted to a new person and still acted like who he was, yet everybody was okay with it?? No one was alarmed at all. Even if the MC was pulling out all these ideas from the modern world, everyone shrugged it off like it was normal. Just reading from first 20 chapters or so, you can already tell how MC-centric the story is. The characters' personality are only showed when it is convenient to the MC, like they don't have any life to them at all. And the mini time skips don't help at fleshing out the characters at all. I really hope the writer would improve as the story has a good potential and I would definitely love to see it achieve it, but as for reading it now, I might have to pass on it. However, this critic is just my opinion tho. If you are unsure about my opinion, you can read it to see it for yourself and see whether you like it or not.