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The_Pianist

The_Pianist

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  • The_Pianist
    The_Pianist3yr
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    I'd say so far that the overall plot is interesting. There are a few spelling mistakes here and there, but I like the characters so far. In terms of dialogue, the characters didn't really sound like you'd assume they'd sound, such as the driver asking about what Beacon's power was. Furthermore, grammar is a bit off, I'd check over the next chapter before publish.

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    Manawell
    Fantasy · Aten_Deitine
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  • The_Pianist
    The_Pianist3yr
    Commented

    Tbh I feel like you should set up lore either in a prequel book or just explain it as exposition in this book

    Ch 1 Prolouge
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    Manawell
    Fantasy · Aten_Deitine
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  • The_Pianist
    The_Pianist3yr
    Replied to rebecca_ringdomsto

    Bot pog?

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    Manawell
    Fantasy · Aten_Deitine
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