Longo_loom
I am Longo, I am no jack of all trades but I like exploring different things
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Longo_loom2yrCommentedWell then you better get working
"Fi-fi-ve bi-big pla-platinum co-coins!!!!! That's equal to five thousand white gold coins and now you want me to pay that huge amount!!! It is equal to ten years of income from the kingdom's accumulated tax income.", The human king exclaims while still coughing out some blood.- Longo_loom2yrCommented
I read an Isekai where th MC died to a book and now they Have book ptsd, I lost the book if you find it on webnovel please Tell me
"I am Axel Everheart, 17 years old and you don't have to know my death. It is embarrassing as heck!", I say. - Longo_loom2yrReplied to Longo_loom
A suggestion would be to fill in the comment I made '(whatever you are going to write)’ with "as she struggles to keep pace with me.” {sorry for commenting a lot.} I am not implying that you need to rewrite the book, however it would be better if you learn more literature practice. I have read to chapter four and the story is great! Yet the grammer could use a lot of improvements.
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Im not the best writer and this suggestion is annoying, but when you start a story it’s important to 'tab' or to double space before paragraphs.
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I need that indestructable stomache!
*Host receives Environmental Adaption and Indestructible Stomach.*