A story. I almost wanted to make another fanfic but I don't feel like I know any series well enough to write about and not leave massive glaring plotholes.

Much obliged. Also made me question my memory. I could've sworn 'ting' was also an all-inclusive word meaning something like people, objects and things existing, both alive and not. I think I made that up somehow.

Thank, fixed. Don't know how to do emotes, but- (thumbs up)

Remembered now that I could've sworn I missed something, and I was right. Regarding her age, she is physically 16 at the moment, however, she's only technically been alive for 12 years because of her 'spawning' on the cusp of graduating from 'toddlerhood' which I consider to be at the age of 4. Her mental age on the other hand is a bit weird since I never planned to have Nana become a 'human' through and through despite not bringing it up in the story. A part of her race might be human but her mind decidedly is not. Another reason I'm skewy on romance and such.

I want to at some point, but I don't know when or even if I will. I guess it's tentatively dropped at this point, unfortunately. For a more in-depth answer, I replied to a similar question in chapter 10's comments.

Mostly. In the picture I don't get the feeling that the girl is as tall as I imagine Nana to be, but it's essentially that, a bit curvier in the hips, slighty more muscular and more toned/jacked overall. Don't know if I conveyed her bodily proportions in terms of height and width enough outside of brief descriptions, but in my head I picture Murasakibara from Kuroko no Basket, only slightly taller, as a reference for her general mannerisms.

Back when I wrote the prologue I hadn't yet decided on a grading system, only did when I needed it really, so I'm not sure if I should go back and change it a bit or have 'Special' grade items be a thing for unspecified items you can't really categorize. The Companion Crystal for example, if Trogal had decided not to go the route he did with Nana i.e weak but with potential, a fairly strong being would've popped out instead. So the question is, would it then be a Rare, Epic or Legendary seeing as it's effect could vary to such an extent.

Actually didn't think about that, don't know if I'll do anything plot relevant with it or just say it runs on some sort of ultra battery I never bothered to show her changing and be done with it.

Oh, it took a second until it clicked. "It" wasn't developed by the same company/people that developed VR which is why she had to go get "it" herself. If you see anything else that stands out feel free to point it out! Also made me happy someone liked the story enough for a re-read despite the haphazardness of most of it. :)

As much as I would like to present myself as someone capable to thinking that far ahead in terms of plot, alot of the things that may look to be connected to past events are actually lucky coincidences lining up on my side since I have a tendency to completely forget what I've previously written unless it's stuck in my mind for some reason. At the moment I don't have any concrete plans regarding the Knights of Radiance other than them being a big part of Abaddon's motivation, however, the idea of having them being connected with Roland's kingdom either directly or by proxy is awesome. Do you mind if I incorporate your idea into the story? (If I still remember by the time it becomes relevant that is.) On a side note, I totally plan on having Nana and Trogal meeting each other eventually.

Glad to hear it. Unfortunately I write day by day so I don't really have any backlog of chapters and I don't want to put it on pause just to stack up.

They will.

Currently, I honestly don't know. I have found that my desire to write is pretty flippant and can just instantly disappear at times. I eventually want to get it to 100k words but I'm not sure when, or even if, I will get back to it again. Not to mention that I apparently really easily forget what I've already written so I may not be able to recreate the same feeling that everyone seemed to like. Sorry.

So far it's a pretty good read there's alot of cool ideas you've incorporated into the novel but I feel like some were added just as an afterthought which while not a bad thing, makes them seem underutilized. In terms of writing quality the beginning of the novel was pretty shaky honestly, however there is a stark contrast between chapter 1 and chapter 10 as the quality made a huge jump so you're improving very quickly. As for the characters themselves, it's a bit early to tell but I feel like I can at least get the general feeling of how you want to portray them which is a good start. I don't really know what more to write but in conclusion, although the novel had a shaky start, I think you're very quickly improving your writing and it really shows, keep it up!

Thanks for the comment. About Koko getting more mature, this isn't a story about Koko's emotional developement and gradual maturity into adulthood, it's literally her messing with everyone and how that will affect the world at large. If you were waiting for it to eventually happen, it's probably not unfortunately. Just wanted to clear it up now in case you were waiting for it. Also thanks for not just writing 'bad novel' and being done with it.

I see.

Oops

Gonna be honest, I wrote Divide Divining by accident when I wasn't focusing and when I read through it I thought, why not?