Very well written. The characters are consistent with their personalities. Magic, action, fantasy, and royalty are all well mixed together without becoming confusing. Some of the grammar is kind of confusing which makes it sort of hard to read.
Very well written, I applaud your story writing. The world is adequately explained without over informing, the main character is interesting, and the fighting is detailed as well as realistic.
Very interesting story. Well written, detailed but doesn’t overshare, and very immersive. It avoids white room syndrome and the world building is well done. Introducing the characters is also not forced and done smoothly without seeming awkward. The elements fit in with each other and create a well written story. Some of the chapters are quite long though, and it can cause you to lose your attention span. I’d recommend cutting the chapters down and seperating the scenes so it doesn’t seem climped together.
Very interesting story and plot, though slightly generic. The new terminology is kind of difficult to understand. The time skip is awkward and confusing. He got stabbed in the chest, right? How is he still an “angel?” Also, the fight scene is kind of unrealistic, even for supernatural beings. Any hit, whether it’s getting stabbed or being slammed against a wall will elicit some type of reaction of pain.
This story really isn’t that great. There are a lot of spelling and grammar errors, making it difficult to follow the story. The main character is very generic. The story undershares information on the world, and there’s nothing to make me sympathize for the main character or her family. I quickly lost interest by the middle of the first chapter because of the lack of detail and the “white-room syndrome.”
I actually really love this. The story is interesting and the happenings of the world are intriguing. The caps are a bit cliche and there are some grammatical errors, but aside from that, this book has a lot of potentials. Would love to see how the powers are expanded on.
Look, I only read the first chapter so take whatever I saw with a grain of salt. The plot and storyline are very generic. Nothing stands out in this book. The text messages are cliche. The description of who I'm guessing is the main love interest is very hard to read, too wordy, and cringe.
Interesting story and plot. Spends a bit too much time and effort into describing the appearances of the characters. Some continuity issues, grammatical and spelling errors. This book has the potential to become a great story if done correctly.
Good story, but sort of generic plot. I'd say to explore more unique aspects than just having a bisexual male lead. Some grammatical errors and spelling errors, but aside from that, it has potential.
I read up till about chapter 4-6, so take my opinion with a grain of salt. Although this book isn't something I personally wouldn't read, it is a very interesting story. Aside from some grammatical errors and the story being slow-paced, it has potential. I will say to change the rating from General Audiences to Parental Guidance Suggested. Also, females don't normally say 'girl' at the end of every sentence. Make sure to do research on **** pregnancy and pregnancy in general. I'm sure this will become a great book.
A very interesting start to what looks like is going to be a very popular book. I am very interested to know what had happened to the land. I also would love to learn about these different sectors and how the presidency became a monarchy. The large paragraph blocks can seem a bit harsh on the eyes and the continuity aspects do have some problems, like capitalizations and missing details.
Thank you so much for this review, I love you. Most of my chapters will be at least more than 1.5k words all the way up to around 4k. My chapters update biweekly, every friday and monday.
I am not going to point out how similiar it is the another book that I will not be naming. All of the POV switches can get very confusing and the one line at a time is very drawn out and can become boring. It’s well written and has an interesting storyline.
Thats technically three hours... but okay
Really enjoyed reading this book. I think that being more varied in the description of stuff wouldn’t hurt. Also, I would suggest to not use ‘then’ so often as a descriptor. The dialogue is also a bit awkward at times.
Really enjoyed reading so far. Looking forward to where this book will develop in the future. Love the calendar system and the character development. Some scenes are awkwardly written out and seem rushed or flat, but I’m sure that will not be a problem later on.