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eM9ine7mthReplied to aiden_riveraNah, they wrote it right
"I'm pretty sure he's still on the fence about killing the redhead," Leo stated. "He can tell something is going on but it'll be a while before it becomes apparent. So in the meanwhile, I rather avoid stepping on any toes before we set anything in stone. I'd rather not make an enemy out of him if possible. He never taught me jack shit, but he's good people."- eM9ine7mthReplied to Rose_BloodKillCh 45 Chomp!
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I'm not gonna lie. this introduction to romance into the story is probably one of the worst I've read. I mean, what does Leo know about Ai other than she is an idol and goes to his school? what do WE know about Ai. It just feels like it was written because of a random idea that appeared halfway through the chapter. there is no development at all and as a reader I've not even had a chance to connect with Ai as a character and it just seems out of character for Leo from what we've seen from him up to this point. also the whole betraying the devil hunters also just seems like a spur of the moment thing aswell. what is his motivation for doing it? We are literally in his head reading his thoughts throughout the story and there was no build up to this from what I could tell. Maybe we'll learn his reasons in the future but it would've been alot nicer to see some reasons as to why before he just does it. the entire story up until this point has been very coherent and good. this chapter just feels like a notepad for ideas.
Ch 45 Chomp! - eM9ine7mthReplied to Daoist9177NN
bro, same... this felt like a drug fueled fever dream
Their faces got closer and closer, their breaths mingling in the small space between them. The world seemed to fade away as Leo and Ai's lips finally met in a tender and gentle kiss. It was a moment filled with warmth and an unspoken connection. - eM9ine9mthCommented
bro is rocking legitimately one of the worst cuts known to man
Max isn't sure exactly what that is, but it sounds professional, so he nods. A digital clipper turns out to be a mesh towel of sorts. It sits over his head, adjusts shape to whatever Nico is instructing it to do with that strange ability of hers, and then with a wave of buzzing, Max has a brand new haircut, safely within regulations, and Nico collects the blonde tresses of his perm. - eM9ine3yrCommentedCh 7 Building a army..