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Wataku3mthReplied to GuionistaI know right? There's so much lore about Bartmoss as a character but he plays little part in the actual game. ;_;
"Why- If you are Rache Bartmoss you should know I'm here to kill you."- Wataku3yrCommented
Hm, that’s actually a pretty unique description.
The cloaked person was revealed as her hood feel down it was a girl one side of her head shaved off and other side cut short and coloured grey half of her face had a massive birth mark going across it, and her blue eyes gleamed. - Wataku3yrPosted
The first chapter starts off strong with both great descriptions of the environment and interesting set-ups. The grammar and choice volcabulary is also a strong point for this novel as well. If your looking for a mysterious plot with good twist on supernatural. Hit this book up; you won’t regret it. ~CP-sama
- Wataku3yrCommented
WTH; that was hella quick. I thought there was going to be more to these characters! We’ll there’s like three other Emperors right? So its fine I guess.
"I thought you could be of good use to me just like that Benkei dimwit...guess I've been wrong twice Hekekeke" Minka jumped onto the emperor eating on his face all that was heard was crunching sounds and screams. - Wataku3yrCommented
Dude, 100 dollars if she’s cooking his brother.
"Nearly ready honey I'm cooking some nicccee stew". Sayomi shouted gently. - Wataku3yrCommented
Called it. Bro, is she going to be a special yokia? I also have a Jorōgumo in a chapter but she’s only around for then. But, there will be an important Tsuchigumo in the future.
"Ohhh! How silly of me I'm Sayomi and as you probably could tell I'm a Yokai specifically a Jorogumo {Spider type Yokai}" She smiled with innocence in her eyes. - Wataku3yrCommented
Aww, I was hoping he would get yellow. So it would be a naruto and Sasuke thing between him and Hissori
And there it was Nelens aura tightly contained with a faint green. - Wataku3yrCommented
“Took the a fleet” Its your choice but I would remove either the “the” Or “a”.
"I immediately left to go see what had happened and took the a fleet with me. Once we got there, I saw something that struck a pain down my chest; fire crossed the sands, and the bodies burnt to a crisp…" Commander Benkei looked dead in the eyes of the emperor who's expression changed to be concerned. - Wataku3yrReplied to Wataku
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"SIR a Sando (sandstorm) is heading our way!" One of his men yelled. - Wataku3yrCommented
Awesome, Asian vocabulary. I see you are “also” a man if class.
"SIR a Sando (sandstorm) is heading our way!" One of his men yelled. - Wataku3yrCommented
Stranger Danger. Also very descriptive, focusing on giving us/I a good visual picture of Akane's surroundings.
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