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Jus a teenage girl who likes to write stories (can't update daily/weekly tho due to work & family stuff) Things I Like - Pop music/K-Pop - Anime - Listening to music - My best friends/lover - Reading

2020-11-12 JoinedUnited States
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    Thank u!

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    Such a wise saying. I can agree with you on that. Can we talk more on Discord about this, if you have it? My username is @niyaa1617 #6491.

    'I think I'm in love with Khalil Castle. And I can't deny the thought of it, either.'
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    Ok, I get it. Thx for this suggestion. I'll be sure to include it.

    "You're right. Maybe it was the best choice to just do it. We don't know who this person is, or what he's capable of," I say to him just as I see headlights to my right side. I know it's Ali pulling up now with the snacks. I mean, who else is gonna come to the beach at 9:30 at night? "So how are you gonna get the drugs?"
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    Yessss, not needing wifi to read books on there was probably my favorite thing about Wattpad. I just don't have a lot of reads for my book on there as I do on Webnovel (32 reads WP, 1.3K reads WN)

    When I bring up the fact that I'll get one of my girls to figure out everything he's doing, I'm smiling devilishly and he's looking shocked and scared, both of us knowing what I'm talking about. I have a specific amount of girls for our gossip page for our school. I have exactly six girls to help me out with doing one task each: a hacker, a second-in-command, and my other four that let me know details about anything that's juicy for the blog. You can basically say it's my gang of girls for a gossip blog.
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    You know what? That's a good idea. I hadn't even thought of that, but I will use it. Thank you! (Sorry for future readers since it is kind of a spoiler hehe)

    Ch 9 8/26: First Period - Khalil Castle
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    Yes, in a way he is, but he will learn that the only way to play with fire is to play either with more fire or burn it out with water (in simpler words, his friends will help him out with this conflict).

    But I did it to keep Khalil & I safe, though.
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    Well, I could agree to disagree with you about this. Even if teenagers have no idea what it means, they could always learn about it at whatever time that it comes for them, if that makes sense. However, there are some teens that are just willing to accept that they already know about love even if they've had no experience with it. I, personally, know what it means, and Alixandria knows what it means, too, as does Chan-hee (which will be explained later in the story). Khalil will just have to find out on his own what it means to feel love, too.

    'I think I'm in love with Khalil Castle. And I can't deny the thought of it, either.'
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    But wouldn't that kinda ruin the plot of the story? I mean, think about it, this is a situation that they were put into. What fun would it bring to include the police in it? That's only what I think in my opinion. But, anywho, everyone has their opinion about everything, right?

    "You're right. Maybe it was the best choice to just do it. We don't know who this person is, or what he's capable of," I say to him just as I see headlights to my right side. I know it's Ali pulling up now with the snacks. I mean, who else is gonna come to the beach at 9:30 at night? "So how are you gonna get the drugs?"
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    My book was originally written on Wattpad, hence why you sense Wattpad-esque vibes. Also, thx for the hacker information. I will try to use this information in future chapters in the story.

    When I bring up the fact that I'll get one of my girls to figure out everything he's doing, I'm smiling devilishly and he's looking shocked and scared, both of us knowing what I'm talking about. I have a specific amount of girls for our gossip page for our school. I have exactly six girls to help me out with doing one task each: a hacker, a second-in-command, and my other four that let me know details about anything that's juicy for the blog. You can basically say it's my gang of girls for a gossip blog.
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    Ah ok, thx for the suggestion. I'll keep this in this chapter, but all other secrets shall be kept until the end (or when a time comes when it must be told).

    "Ok, first of all, you're being very chatty. When a person is chatty, I know they're lying to me. Second of all, you're scratching your head. You never do that unless you're lying to me or Ali, or in fact, anyone at that. Thirdly, you look scared out of your mind. I can see you're trying to change the face you're making, but it's not working," I tell him before adding while folding my arms together, "so you better tell me, or I guess I'll just have to get one of my girls to figure it out for myself."
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    Lol, I understand where you're coming from, but I did make a change to this chapter so it doesn't seem like he's just accepting do it straight from the top of his head.

    Ch 3 8/25: Unexpected Beginning - Khalil Castle
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    Lol

    Me: Who is this? How did you get my number?
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    Ikr, glad to see a fellow BTS fan!

    At that moment, a knock comes on the front door. I go straight to the door, unlock it, and open it to see that it's Ali's mother. "She's right outside. Be careful out there," she tells me as I let her come in. I say goodbye to both of them and close the door. In the side driveway, I see the blue Ford Fusion Hybrid sitting there with Ali inside. I run to the passenger's side and slide right in, closing the door right after. I turn off my music and Bluetooth, then taking out my earbuds and snapping them in the magnetic pieces to make them unmovable. After I do, I hear the low volume of a BTS song playing on the radio, specifically 'DNA', and start dancing a little, making Ali chuckle a bit at me. P.S. I'm basically the reason why Ali likes BTS anyway.
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    Thank u for the suggestion!

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  • niyaa1617
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    You're welcome. If you have any more questions, my discord is @niyaa1617 #6491. And also, it's ok, no biggie. The chapter titles show just be paid attention to a lot more than other books.

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    Hi SolAce, thank u for your review. I would like to respond to some of your questions. 1. Why didn’t the male friend contact the police or ask his friends for help? The male friend doesn't contact the police about this mystery person because he's already pretty sure he wouldn't get any help from them. Even though I didn't mention it in my book, it's commonly known that asking the police for help would get them killed. However, he does ask one of his friends for help because he trusts her, but not his other friend because she's always worried about the both of them and he didn't want to stress her out with this. 2. Why didn’t he confide with his mother or his other two friends about it; ‘cause if the perpetrator is targeting them, at least they should be aware and cautious of it... right? In another chapter, which will be released next week, he will tell at least one of his friends about the perpetrator targeting them. Only those two will be aware of it. They don't tell their other friend because they don't want to worry her. Their other friend is always stressed out and constantly working on stuff that they don't really find the right time to tell her about it until the perpetrator actually starts to come after them. Now, the reason for not telling his mother is because she works, too, and she knows (or at least expects) that her son wouldn't do such a thing as selling drugs due to his father passing away from doing drugs. If she were to find out, she would possibly kill him herself. 3. Why did he date the snotty, rich girl from school if he wasn’t that interested in her? ( Usually, people in love would see their partner as the most beautiful person in the world while he just says, ”Her makeup is a bit heavy, but she is beautiful enough to attract other guys, etc...” ) Is it because his mother worked for her family’s company? So he got peer pressured? Yes, it is because his mother worked for her family's company and peer pressure caused him to be in this loveless relationship. The snotty, rich girl (aka the enemy of his other friends) is not someone he trusts because he knows she can be manipulative. Say if he didn't go out with her, if he didn't, her parents would likely do something to his mother to make him do so. So, because he thought of his mother and how she would be affected, he is in this relationship (which he will be out of later in the story). Now the second issue is the usage of switching POVs. I had actually read nearly 3/4 of the second chapter without noticing it wasn’t the same person from the first chapter, leaving me confused and having to recheck the story once more to get a hang of it. I would greatly suggest for you either focus on one character in first-person and call the rest with their names or go third-person entirely to prevent future confusion. With this, the chapter names are supposed to indicate the switching of POVs of each mc. If you don't read the chapter name, then, of course, you wouldn't know that it switched from one character to another. Each of the character's POVs will be written from their point of view. In the future, there is a possibility that a few chapters will be written in the 2nd or 3rd person, but it's not really known yet since we haven't gotten that far. I'm sorry you got confused about this, but try reading the chapter names first before reading the chapter. Again, I thank you for your review, and your thoughts will be taken into consideration for my first novel.

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    Thanks for recommending your book to me! I really love how the story is written. There are a few grammatical errors, but other than that, you should try to explain your character's design (physical features, clothing, etc.) in more detail. Overall, great book. Added to my library to look for improvements!

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    Thank u very much!!

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    Discord: @niyaa1617 #6491

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    From the first chapter alone, this is a fun and intriguing book to read! Very good descriptions and I love how it's written in the narrator's point of view instead of 1st person or 3rd person. Thx for recommending your book to me!

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