Bigglesworth

I like the story. The issue I'm having is that The author is repeating themselves over and over again by writing the same thing in different ways. There are entire chapters that are written about something that would take maybe a paragraph. Half the time you can read the first paragraph and then skim the entire rest of the chapter and still understand very clearly what happened. Other than that, I like the idea of the story. I like the writing of the story, but too much expounding on things that don't matter much.

First, his hands were the size of dustbin lids, and now they're demoted to the size of a small child?

I never understand why characters ask this stupid question. It's like saying, "Please take this away from me and never give me anything this nice again."

He's using magical Google. He needs to word things correctly to get the answers he wants. He's just being a lazy moron.

Females do not have a prostate.

The terminal velocity of a coin is between 20 and 75 mph. Not that fast. But I do know what you meant. Cool power.

Hey, halo grunts are a riot.

I love this story so far. The main issue I have that is causing me to drop it is that the character is unbelievably stupid/simping/stalkerish. It's almost physically painful reading what he's doing. I know some people will be fine with that, but for me, I can't handle that.

Maybe that's why she's creating neurons for him. Because he's dumb as a rock.

Pretty sure he wasn't in a clean suit so...