I'll just say i read this instead of paying attention in class cuz it's really magical, really well made and overall it's perfect!! keep it up!!!
there's nothing to say other than, i want to be in that world... it's magnificent!!! i love it!!! [img=update][img=update][img=update] keep it up!!!
the synopsis is really good, it's catchy. when it comes to the story as it is, the first few chapters feel rather heavy and overwhelming, the characters feel a bit plain too, but with the development of the story they start gaining volume and become for tridimensional. overall it is a good story. though i would have loved to see distributing details more evenly throughout the story and catching little details later on, rather than being told how the characters are right away. keep it up
The writing is ok, but I can't separate the dialogs from the narrative, i can't identify the change between characters and I cant understand what's happening. the story is good once you pay attention, but it's hard to tell. keep up, don't give up!
i can't understand the universe yet, but the story is interesting, the writing does lack a bit of polishing but is good. the main character seems a bit overpowered but Its ok. good job overall
THIS IS ABSOLUTELY AMAZING! I feel bad for MC (cuz i havent read her name yet) but it feels desply relatable. sO much that somehow it hurts. great woek author![img=update][img=update]
i love the characters a lot!! they are absolute dumbasses but I love em!!! the story is also awesome, this goes to my reading!!! keep up the good work!!!
kts a really good story, the first chapters are quite confusing for me but as you keep reading you catch up the tiny details . keep up the good work!!
THE VOCABULARY IS IMMACULATE, THE WRITING PERFECT AND CATCHING, AND OH SO TRUTH SPEAKING. I FUCKING ADORE IT AND IT SPEAKS FOR ITSELF, I LOVE IT
This tupe of storis aint my cup of tea, but this oNe is really well written! Contrats author-chan! keep up the good work!! [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
Nice.... YOU ACTUALLY USED THE SPANISH PROPERLY!!
ITS REALLY GOOD!! I REALLY LIKE IT! I can aready see where the story is going and i can feel the dramma approach as i read Plus the wRiting is impecable Keep up the good work!
the background of the story is good, though a bit unclear, I wish there were paragraph separations, it all seems like one block of text... it can definitely improve and it has hella potential! keep going!
historical based reading? i love those, though the dialogs are long, the writing is nice and quite easy to digest . keep up the good work!!!
the writing is nice, though some research would come in fitting . the development of the story is one I like and it was genious to use a different language for code places.
this one IS well conjugated
it's not really well conjugated, it would be "Casa escondite" or "Casa escondida" esconder is the base form of the verb .
casa esconder is in spanish right???