TheMizMind
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"Bullet Knight" shows promise from the start, with an intriguing premise that captures the reader's attention. However, some noticeable flaws hinder the overall reading experience. The transitions within the first chapter are abrupt and lack smoothness, making it challenging to follow the narrative flow. While the novel showcases an impressive vocabulary, grammatical struggles can distract and disconnect the reader. It requires careful attention to grasp the story, and reading hastily may confuse. Despite these shortcomings, "Bullet Knight" remains a compelling tale with untapped potential. The story possesses elements that can captivate readers once the readability issues are addressed. With some refinements and improved engagement, it can fully immerse and resonate with its audience.
How would he know if he asked and he didn't mention a title?
Very sharp transition
Some grammatical mistakes still, but I'm seeing a huge leap in writing skills. Keep up the good work!
You wouldn't capitalize mountain here unless your mountain's name is literally Mountain
I like the premise and the idea behind the story; however, I don't think this was executed in a way that shows its full potential. There is a lot of refinement needed which is very common in new authors, and a lot of grammatical errors that need to be fixed. The first impression is everything, I recommend at least fixing up your first few chapters to hook in the reader! I hope my review helped!
Has good potential. Grammar needs work, and chapters are very short but can be overcome with quantity. I also like the layout making it easier to read instead of huge blocks of text which can be hard for a web novel. I gave this 5*'s but in all honesty, I don't know what it deserves as I don't read this genre often or ever.
Split personality disorder?