"Like a robot, she immediately switched >> off << the smile >> off << her face and >> plonk << herself down on her office chair." *the 'off' is repetitive. I suggest rewriting this sentence. For ex. "Like a robot, she immediately switched the smile off her face..." and other examples. *i believe the 'plonk' is of the wrong tense and should be 'plonked'.

I suspected it was that- I usually go by 'tsk' or 'tsked' but this is a new glimmer of knowledge.

Oh! I see. On that note, it's understandable as that is what I was trying to attempt with my novel as well. i'm not a fan of infodumping--but on that note, have you thought of perhaps dropping hints here and there? not necessarily revealing everything but foreshadowing. If you've thought about it then understandable! I hope things go well on your end. [img=recommend]

I was on chapter six before i realized I should probably write the review now. first off, I enjoyed it. There were a few straying punctuation but could easily be fixed. I enjoyed the concept, and the characters are enjoyable to read. As I commented in the 1st chapter, a lot more details could be provided to add clarity. at some parts, it is confusing. The reader is only given the vibrancy of our FL's persona, and the other character's brightness. A lot more detail could make a big difference! I want to know the aura the school, the villain's choice of clothes, their home, their facial appearance ( for ex. the way you describe Min was very well and could be done a little further ). The reader is also given no context of the facial expressions when saying something despite the words they say are very clear, you shouldn't exactly expect the reader to do it all up. Overall, continue the great work! I hope you're not too offended, and I shall continue supporting this series! [img=update][img=recommend]

AHHH! LOVE THE MINDSET.

MUST BE PROTECTED.

Aria is doing so well! And those terrible bullies deserve worst for hurting sweet Min!

Again, I most certainly loved this chapter!

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Love Aria so much---

I sincerely love the start. These kinds of novels are my absolute favorite especially when the female lead catches on quick against a scrupulous system. There were a few misplaced punctuation, but the grammar here is absolutely superb. would like to note that the start feels very well, but i feel as if a lot more description could be added regarding the female lead's expression, and thoughts.However, their actions reflect this well enough creating a vivid effect. Though, adding a few details wouldn't be so bad. It's a little confusing in the part of her death, what happened, and how some part of her reasoning isn't explained further. i suppose you might be trying for a third person, omniscient?

exactly, don't be mean system 😆

the apostrophe at the end of this paragraph doesn't coordinate with the rest as it seems this is not the end of what the system has to say.

"The smugness radiating from the ball feels tangible >> , << as it rests on her shoulder." the comma is unnecessary.

*whether

i think the comma here is unnecessary. "but a slow, thundering, beat echoes >> , << within, and beyond..."

Good book! I enjoyed the fact that the first three chapters introduce the author to our amusing and charming female lead. Its just the fact that the very first chapter feels dragging, but overall? it is good! i believe the update stability is high, and i'll have to admit that the author's writing is very good!

it's an interesting start, albeit, feels a lot like a portfolio.

poor man.

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