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I have read ALOT of web novels, so now I'm trying to write some
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The main criticism I can make is its Waaaaaaaaay too rushed and I don't think the author understands the show don't tell rule. the author needs to slow down and SHOW me how his father was a good man not tell me. all the small things the MC mentions his dad did for him in that list the author needs to expand on them by giving them scenes. I know that is hard to do but it will make his death so much more impactful.