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Darth_Wartriarr5mthCommentedCh 6 On the Run- Darth_Wartriarr5mthCommentedCh 5 Freedom
- Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
The bloodline? I"m guessing a path to power
"Report back to the Patriarch, I have found the bloodline," Cessair informed him, a small smile growing upon his lips. "Two young boys, Darius and Alexander Raff, sons of Bill and Joan Raff. They are the sole survivors of the plane crash that happened near Stockdale." - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Another reason for him to get stronger
He didn't know if it was possible, but Darius wanted revenge. - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
At least your not brushing off how traumatised the mc should be with everything that happened.
The only reason Darius did not break down alongside his brother was precisely because he had to get his brother to safety. It was only then that Darius could let out the emotions within him yet part of him hoped that would never come to be. - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommentedCh 3 Brothers
- Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Overall a pretty decent followup to the prologue I'm wondering where you'll take it from here. You gonna do a time skip anytime soon cos I'm guessing Darius is still a kid tho don't know how old as you didn't say. Either way looking forward to what comes after
Ch 2 Lost Family - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Nice, some little hint of whats going on in the stars
"It will soon be dead, leave it." Tah rose into the air, three more armoured figures moving forward to help free the woman from the belt that held her in place, the child in her arms dropping to the floor in a bloody and broken mess. "We must depart now, our trip here has been successful. Now we must return home and prepare for what is to come. The Citadel is constantly pressuring our borders and we cannot be absent for too long." - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Another survivor?
All had perished, yet somehow there were survivors, he could hear their heartbeats and that of one more not far from here. All three were weak, yet still beating though two were growing faint. - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
I'm guessing that child is Darius and that would be his mother
"Take them to the ship, we must depart from Earth before others learn of our presence here." The man floated down to the ground, arriving before a beautiful red-haired woman who had wrapped herself around a small child, protecting it. - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
So did they all die?
The armoured figure nodded its head. "They do. Though they will need to be resuscitated as they perished in the crash." - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
That's the beginning of his journey to power right there feeling helpless and powerless to save himself would be a pretty good motivator for someone to get stronger
He was going to die. - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Aliens I'm guessing?
Darius focused upon that and perhaps because he did, he was the only one to notice that symbol split apart, the doors opening to reveal a single figure looking down upon them, a cape billowing out to the side in the wind. It stepped forward and began walking through the air. - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Now that was a cool line reminds me of the one from the God Butcher storyline where the All-Black devoured the sun
In that moment, for a single instance, the entire multiverse bled crimson. - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Nothing more dangerous than a man with nothing left to lose
He was accepting of his fate to come. - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Is he though? I feel like in a prologue like this, if the story ever reaches this point cos some offers give up long before it ever reaches that point but if it does I reckon it won't be nearly as bad as its made out to be and that there will be some mysterious group of survivors coming to his aid.
The last living being of any kind facing the greatest evil alone. - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Never heard of someone called that before
How even to the very end when he stood alone, he, Darius Raff did not abandon his goal? - Darth_Wartriarr6mthCommented
Written by the victor you mean
But often a story was written not by the individual themselves, but by those who had known them. Or sometimes by those who came after and had not truly known the life they had lived, only a fraction of it. - Darth_Wartriarr1yrPosted
Always love ur stories, but hopefully it doesn't take us ages to get back to where the story originally was. Lookng forward to see what new villains u include but again, as long as it doesn't take ages to get back the original point in the story. I'm also glad uve decided to change this to an OC and I'm wondering if u intend to include the elements of the Narutoverse that u had included in the old version.
- Darth_Wartriarr2yrReplied to 45unifol21
U do realise this is an actual military tactic used in the ancient world, it was just so insanely difficult and requires certain things to go perfectly to plan. Oberyn, Harry Strickland and Jon Connigton all acted a fixed points, the author even described them as rocks in a lake, I think? These points I’m guessing direct the wave of troops around while Aegon leads a cavalry charge that creates a wave. Honestly it’s pretty similar to the tactic used by Riboku in Kingdom against Duke Hyou, I’m guessing that’s where the author got it from. Also have u even been reading properly, It’s been pointed out that Daenerys doesn’t want to hurt her own people, so that’s why she hasn’t blasted him with dragon fire and so what if Aegon is given plot armour, pretty sure the author did that to give us this battle. It’s actually nice to see Robb meet an equal on the battlefield.
Ch 119 A Clash of Dragons and Wolves