chapter 3 while entertaining I was feeling that it was almost as if I was playing a roleplaying game and I didn't have the mechanics of the game

second chapter was very entertaining but it jumped into action very quickly and it does keep me guessing as I am not always sure what is happening. it is very fun to read

I really enjoyed this but there was one part where it seemed that we had a double negative and while it may be correct it took me time to try and decipher instead of just enjoying the story. Wonderful job and am going to look forward to more from you

the first chapter is very good and looking at it there is so much potential and I really enjoyed how this was done. first chapter read and was great.