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Daniel_Devlin9mthCommentedI thought he bid 90,000.
With a triumphant smile, the auctioneer declared, "Ladies and gentlemen, the Celestial Wing Blades have found their rightful owner. Sold to the mysterious cultivator for an astounding 80,000 soul coins!"- Daniel_Devlin10mthCommented
What is 'wase'? Should it be 'ease'? I'd be really impressed if it was 'blasé'.
"Has common sense died? How come youngsters these days perform such ridiculous feats with such wase?!" - Daniel_Devlin10mthCommented
Pretty sure 10 was a failing score. (40 was the minimum).
Syndra was next, her biceps flexing as she punched the strength evaluator. The machine sprung to life, registering a solid score of 10 points. This was a score hardly anyone else had reached, making Syndra the star of the moment. She was a woman, sure, but her strength outmatched most of the men around. - Daniel_Devlin10mthCommented
It's ironic that magic flames are the inverse of natural flames where blue flames are hotter than red.
With a snap of his fingers, Roy conjured magic flames of varying intensities that flickered to life before him. The flames danced and swirled, and their colors ranged from blue and green to purple and red. The temperature of the magic fire varied accordingly, with the blue flames being the coolest and the bright red Emerald one being the hottest. His divine knowledge of alchemy allowed him to choose the ideal fire for each herb, knowing that too much heat could ruin the medicinal essence trapped in their husks. - Daniel_Devlin11mthCommented
didn't like *her* idea, but *she*
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*his* cultivation
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entered *his* body yet?
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*her* disciples
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*her* little sister
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heal *her*
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Yi Mingxia turned *her* back to *her* son and turned *her* head to kiss him.
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"She tried to use *her* charm on you...
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*he* seemed unfazed by her charms.
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Your novel is indeed better grammatically than many on this platform and most of the minor grammar mistakes don't usually phase me. My only issue thus far is in pronoun gender agreement (I.E. using he / him / his to refer to female characters or she / her to refer to male characters) because I sometimes have trouble immediately identifying who the antecedent is. It is not a deal breaker, but it does interrupt the flow. Overall, thank you for the story and good luck with your commute and family going forward.
So if you demand perfect grammar, it's better if you guys read novels from authors who are very fluent in English. - Daniel_Devlin1yrReplied to Unknown333
or avoid
Belen sighed and nodded, "Alright." She also knew they had to use the sparrow if they wanted to 'bandits' laying in wait in the valley. - Daniel_Devlin1yrReplied to Solidgrnd78
At this point she's the only ones he has slept with at all. I suspect the other two simply are not at that stage of their relationship with him.
After a while, Alicia and Riya reluctantly left the room. As soon as the door was closed, Aditya turned back to Alicia. Feeling heated gaze, Alicia blushed. The excitement in her heart was only increasing. Tonight, neither of them was going to sleep. - Daniel_Devlin1yrCommented
Just a guess, but I think that should be *overload* debuff
『It has been affected by the overlord debuff』 - Daniel_Devlin1yrCommented
What is he, Charizard?
His teethes were white and extremely large. Small wisps of crimson flame could form near his nose when he breathed. His tongue was crimson red. The ending of his tail was burning in Crimson flame. - Daniel_Devlin1yrCommented
If that were true the story would never have taken place because Ch 2 says that he got angry when his half brothers called him useless which directly caused him to go hunting and then get attacked leading to the MC getting isekai-ed.
The old man was dumbfounded by this. Max never disrespected anyone or became angry, even when someone mocked him in his face. Now, seeing a different attitude from him, it was normal to be a little surprised. However, he didn't dare to say anything and excused himself. No matter what, he was still the beloved son of the Viscount. - Daniel_Devlin1yrCommented
Since when is Sunny his mother? I thought it was the Queen.
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