Nahuel_Garcia

Bro, first of all I want to congratulate you on the quality of your writing, it seems that you dedicate your time to the topic. If you continue to dedicate yourself to it, I have no doubt that you will be able to write and publish your own book. Unfortunately, although it is of excellent quality, be it character building, points of view, character insertion (there are some inconsistencies compared to the original, but it doesn't feel forced), world building (here it could be improved a little), etc. It's not my type of book, as I usually use this platform for light reading and a bit of laughter (when I get tired of more famous titles like 'el cuervo' or 'la teoría de la relatividad ', etc). I wish you luck and success.

Will Claire and the sisters find the group at some point?

Could you add a note or something letting us know that you modified the chapters? Because for a moment I thought he was crazy and that the whole story of his meeting with Gea and others was something he was imagining or that he was confusing it with another work. thanks for the chapter

This gesture is wrong for this novel, unless games with stories had been created before because the "F" gesture comes from the games with a story where you had to pay your respects at a funeral to a closed coffin or grave in the cemetery, etc.

No :v

royalroad is a good platform for an OG novel to be honest and it's not as biased towards this genre as WN is

Scribblehub It has too many OG novels so I wouldn't recommend it that much unless you are already a well-known author on the platform, you could upload the novel on both platforms with the main one on WN to act as an advertisement and ask readers if they can come by for your scribblehub account to give you a good rating

It is not my intention to offend the author but I prefer to be honest and cruel with someone so that they can improve if that is what they are looking for to sweeten things, that is what I would like them to do with me too, so I can improve and not be hopeful just so that when the truth is told it hit me real hard

It was going well until I got to chapter 32 with the stigma system, I'm not saying that sharing the system was a bad move, it could even result in something more interesting if done well What ruined everything was what happens after giving the system, crudely speaking, it turned the host into a slave without personality and that only follows orders, completely ruining the story in my opinion

Option 3, option 4 :v