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this doesn't sound like something he would say, it's just sound strange and out of character
it would make more sense if you said he hit the waist instead of the chest. There is no way Lucifer is tall enough to reach the chest of a full grown adult
You should have described the place, the city and the palace, after that you would talk about sky and his talk with the emperor. You need to show the world to us, so that the novel will be more interesting
This makes no sense, i can understand a surprise attack, but saying that she can stall him makes no sense, he is an entire realm stronger than her, even if his injuried, he should be able to win against her in one hit, is not like she has an outstanding amour. An entire realm should be something basically impossible to fight unless you have a strong treasure, he can easily evade her sword so she would need someting else.
two face from Batman
I've never seen an author that likes the word "severeal" so much, he never js specific about anything, be it time or power level, it's starting to get annoying
for example, you said rank 1 beast need several man, what are their level? several rank 1 human? several rank 2 human? you need to be especific, if you aren't than it will be more difficult for the reader to understand the levels of power in the world, which will lead to loss of interest in the story
from what we saw, most of them were inside the city using bows, so i suppose there wasn't a lot of close combat fights
I would prefer if there was a more specific power level to the beast, like "rank five beasts need at least five rank 6 earth cultivators", right now is too vague.
on the sinopse you said she wouldn't be op, but the story is going that way, although an OP MC is not necessarily bad, if you say she wouldn' be one, you needed to do things that would show she is strong, but not OP, going head-on, alone, on a horde of 2 thousand beast is something OP, not strong, you should have said that there was other people on the ground fighting the monsters, and then sais that she was killing more than them
This makes no sense, with his wealth, connections and cultivation level, she would have a much more efficent path to power, but for some reason she didn't thought of that.
this is an exagerration, she did not gain an abudant amount of experience, she gain some experience
but with her level of education, i doubt she would know that
Why blood brothers don't have the same surname?
You wrote "Sage Srage" instead of "Sage Grade "
He sold then for 20 or more credits, how is he buying then for 2 credits ?
this "that it created" is completely unnecessary.
we are alreas know the target, you don't need to say "toward the hare" you could just say "It sailed at a frightening pace"
meeee, this just souns like a way to avoid training his aim
Not sure this was the best decision, it's not like the others city are much better than this one. Maybe if they go to the countryside they will have a better chance, but even then 7-8000 SC are not a lot of money to travel there and find a house, new clothes food, etc.