LadyStoic
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An avid consumer of all things yaoi, isekai, and romance. Looking for original works to proofread in my spare time. If you're interested, please contact me on Discord (Ladystoic#4482).
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LadyStoic2yrCommentedIt surely was more pleasant to enjoy something like tarts with another person. Her decision now solidified. The Queen of Hearts would surely make friends.- LadyStoic2yrCommentedHe tilted his head at her, a captivating smile on his face. "If you wish, I can undress you and warm you myself. I can even towel your hair and brush it, Your Majesty."
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The ending was a little confusing. I wasn’t sure what happened until I read the author’s note. You have a unique writing style that I love and I don’t wish to change it but maybe emphasize how she wasn’t paying attention to how far she backed up? Or some imagery of the pond nearby?
Ch 8 One Step, Two Steps Ahead - LadyStoic2yrCommented
Did you mean from the kingdom of diamonds?
"A small trinket from the Kingdom of Hearts, though I assume it is to be a rare and prized thing here. I imagine it would look lovely as you wear it" - LadyStoic2yrCommentedHe could drink in her smile and enjoy the light of her eyes.
- LadyStoic2yrCommented"Be careful with such words before I ask you to cleave your own head off."
- LadyStoic2yrCommentedSick upon seeing his face that is.
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I like the imagery of this
The man stayed silent for a moment, as if pondering her question. He even took the chance to sip his tea as he did, perhaps he was smiling underneath that cloak. She gritted her teeth but waited for his response. - LadyStoic2yrCommented
Oooo I really like the structure of this sentence!! (I'm weird, ik)
"Damn right I won't feel a thing!" Delicate fingers clutched the handle of her teacup before she shattered it, its contents and even the cup itself now strewn on the glass table. "That sadistic bastard! I should have known—" - LadyStoic2yrReplied to ReadIng_nerd
Maybe he meant in a sexy way rather than a literally-eat-you kind if way?
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- LadyStoic2yrReplied to alienfrommarsCh 1 PROLOGUE
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Did you give up on this paragraph?
At the point when that day came, I was prepared I had The hair and outfit done all I needed was the boy , when I strolled in a lot of young ladies played with me I was unberthed by them all they were exhausting I was going to go, I saw The most beautiful baby boy I had seen I could tell he was an omega He walked up on stage, He had the sexist pair of lingerie on I decided to stay for a while I saw him dance while teasing the crowd he mostly winked at me and a few other men. I locked eyes with him while he was on stage. He kept looking at me with greed and lust as he was touching all over his body and I looked at him with lust and desire, caving his touch even more. After the show was over I asked taehyung if he did private dances he nodded he paid taehyung and mouthed¨Bring that ass of yours over to me.Right.Now. To the boy , He slowly walked over to me and asked what I wanted I whispered in his ear and said you. I told him I wanted a private dance he nodded his head and said - LadyStoic2yrCommented
"find a baby boy" sounds weird here.
I was in my office and I was beginning to get frustrated, There was a young lady under the work area giving me a blowjob she was unable to try and get me hard. I advised her to leave, I was drained and there was nobody who could do it for me any longer they all were too submissive and keep complaining how I never said I loved them. Taehyung strolled in my office and saw me zipping up my jeans. I groaned in dissatisfaction. Taeyung asked what's going on and I told him my circumstances. I suggested that I go look at his strip club. I thought about it for a second. I decided that on his vacation day I would go to the strip club and find a baby boy to take care of business with. - LadyStoic2yrCommentedCh 2 Chapter 1
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There are two spots where you have "her". Are they gender fluid or is this a typo?
His first few shifts earned her around 400$ to 700$, which being new was quite a lot; but still significantly lower than the girls and boys who'd worked there longer than him. However, as time went by, he was earning up to 2000$ to 3000$ in a week. When the days were busy and people were moving in and out he would make a significant amount of money; but when the days weren't as busy and there weren't as many people coming in as there was going out he wouldn't make as much, so he would put what he made that day in a jar to save up. He noticed that he would make a little more than the other girls there who were a little older, and realised it was because he was younger. He took it as an advantage for him and would try his best to approach new people and hope they'd become his regulars. He knew being younger meant more private dances, which then meant he would earn 50$ each time. So he would often over look the cons and think about the pros of her new job. Although at times he felt like he was a "Whore" or a "Slut" he always punched it to the back of his mind and carried on. - LadyStoic2yrCommented
I think you mean "earned him around", you have "her" here.
His first few shifts earned her around 400$ to 700$, which being new was quite a lot; but still significantly lower than the girls and boys who'd worked there longer than him. However, as time went by, he was earning up to 2000$ to 3000$ in a week. When the days were busy and people were moving in and out he would make a significant amount of money; but when the days weren't as busy and there weren't as many people coming in as there was going out he wouldn't make as much, so he would put what he made that day in a jar to save up. He noticed that he would make a little more than the other girls there who were a little older, and realised it was because he was younger. He took it as an advantage for him and would try his best to approach new people and hope they'd become his regulars. He knew being younger meant more private dances, which then meant he would earn 50$ each time. So he would often over look the cons and think about the pros of her new job. Although at times he felt like he was a "Whore" or a "Slut" he always punched it to the back of his mind and carried on. - LadyStoic2yrCommented
He has a stripper family now
After the measurements had been finished, he got his official papers saying he was employed, they gave him small amount of money to go and get his shoes and new makeup, and then told him he would be expected on Monday for his first shift. For the first time in a while he smiled brightly, and felt like he was finally achieving something worthy of his happiness. When his first shift rolled around he felt nervous; he felt like he was doing something wrong all the time, and would get embarrassed. However, as soon as he knew they weren't allowed to touch him, his nerves subside and he became more confident and comfortable working there. He met a lot of girls and boys in similar situations and they all vowed to protect each other and watch each others backs. For the first time, he felt like he was finally accepted somewhere. - LadyStoic2yrCommented
Oh jeez, that sounds awful
When Jimin began as a stripper, he was going though a rough patch in life; His stepfather was abusing him day in and day out, while his mother was out working and earning the money. In that time, he would always make comments about his body, like how fat his ass was or how good he would look in lingerie, and this would make him feel uncomfortable around him, sometime even scared and wary - scared that he would touch him - so he spent as much time as possible in school or at work; just to be away from him.