Kai_ball
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I can imagine a piG screaming and i have heard them scream-i just found that in that scene where that imagery was used that it didnt feel like it fit. The dude was falling to his death and it felt like better things could have been used rather than a pig’s scream
The writing I overall good, and while I haven't read too much of the story, the plot seems to move along smoothly. It may just be because this is the usual web novel format -which I am still not all that used to- but the world background seems randomly forced at times. Either way. I can see this story is popular and therefore have high hopes for it
The story so far seems very amusing and I hope for the best with its growing popularity but I think a different comparison could have been used for Gustav's scream. I feel like slaughtered pigs are not the vibe and it takes away from the imagery and story