Rowan_Mcc

cliffhanger >:(

The vocabulary and grammar seems to be fluid, but the story lacks that life that characters should have, for a story about time i find it ironic that there is almost no time perception, we dont know dates, we dont know time skips, everything is happening in one long day with no breaks but substantial amount of activity, i love the idea of a character similar to Wanda but Time stone affected h instead, its just the execution of how you're pacing this story is all over the place, and Ethan just doesn't have Thoughts, i want to know whats going on in his head, but its never fully explained why he is doing what hes doing, it just seems like the timeline for the novel is all over the place with no perception on how long anything is going to take or going to be.

breaking it down?

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not to Dudley at this point in time, he was a frail kid who would get beat up by dudley and his friends and if he did anything to dudley, petunia and vernon would most likely starve him

parrots=People fr

people who said this book was boring are only reading books for OP characters who completely alter the world around them, this fanfic has character development and amazing story arcs, it has subtle hints to the future and seemingly in depth planning, its a proper story, so good job author

if eli somehow got this into hela's system would she then lose her powers and be susceptible to magic?

probably dead or imprisoned because she worked with Grindelwald

i believe English isn't their first language, so some words will not translate correctly