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Maybe I'm just too dumb and not used to English (despite being a native speaker), but there are typos, missing words, possibly sentences in the third (or fifth?) chapter. Again, maybe I am stupid, but the English could do with a lot of touch-up. Can't really say anything about the stability of updates. But again, for the last time, the poor English is one of the few bad things about the book. Another would be the chapters aren't actually split into different chapters? I'm not sure if this was done purposefully, but the chapters are split in the middle of the chapter. One more thing would be that quotation marks ("") are missing in some parts, while the closing ones are sometimes substituted for apostrophe's ('). Still, not a bad read, just needs a lot of touch-up for me, personally. Otherwise, great story development, could use more detailing (a lot of stories need more of that, though), the poems and creativity are amazing, and it has a unique start, of what I've read. Seriously, if I had an ounce of the creativity the author had, I'd be even better than I am now. A little vain, but who isn't?

Hilarious chapter!