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Deehan_661yrPostedIts was a fresh and unique start... Bt for this genre, FL is dumb, innocent, muddle-headed...She is easily manipulated... Someone copied her novel to do murder, she became the prime suspect, her house is monitored by spy camera, she almost died by some car or flowerpot from a building...Still she is thinking, she is hallucinating, scaring herserf...😒 The rltnship btwn ML and FL is dragging... Their rltnship is kind of push and pull game... Which is a huge turn off... Cmon, its not some kind of 'CEO's sweet dumb wife' novel...U should have characters which is beffiting for this genre...
- Deehan_661yrCommentedCh 9 Who is Lying?
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yes, she is... Without him, u would be in jail...😒
Is this nice auntie talking about Bai Muchuan? she thought. - Deehan_661yrCommented
gd luck...
The questions by the detectives were tricky and repetitive. Some questions were totally similar to asking Xiang Wan to prove that her mom was really her mom; she was unable to answer such questions. Moreover, at the time of Zhao Jiahang's death, she was indeed alone in her rented apartment. She couldn't provide an alibi. Furthermore, the old and shabby neighborhood she lived in had no surveillance cameras at all. There was nothing that could prove she was indeed inside her apartment during that period. - Deehan_661yrCommented
Nobody asked u to stare at the boy... 😒
Never would she have guessed that a simple trip to the restroom would end up in receiving detention. It was that boy's fault! Neither he would have jumped right in front of her, nor would she have got herself in trouble, thought Julie to herself. Mr. Borrell seemed to be a person who enjoyed handing detention as if he was distributing free meals. - Deehan_662yrReplied to ChubbyLiv
May be u can write something like this: Just like how one has to damage one's muscles to build new and stronger muscles, the evolvement of the soul has to go through the similar constant damaging and rebuilding. The damage Bing Shi recieved from Guan Fei, who was a powerful soul was too much for Bing Shi's rebuilding soul. She got strong enough to evolve her soul while trying to recover from Guan Fei's blow, bt for how long could she keep up? The close she got to the top of hill, the unstable were her steps and the chances of her falling increased with each passing day...
Helping others to make her soul evolve didn't seem to be the solution. Bing Shi changed her plans and went against Mo Luwei head on right off the bat, and decided to go against Xuan Mu and Quin Yu, at the same time. Her soul showed signs of strengthening, but everyone knew that evolving her soul that had just evolved not a long time ago was simply... impossible. - Deehan_662yrReplied to ChubbyLiv
Which country r u from? Is english ur 2nd language?
Helping others to make her soul evolve didn't seem to be the solution. Bing Shi changed her plans and went against Mo Luwei head on right off the bat, and decided to go against Xuan Mu and Quin Yu, at the same time. Her soul showed signs of strengthening, but everyone knew that evolving her soul that had just evolved not a long time ago was simply... impossible. - Deehan_662yrReplied to ChubbyLiv
so u souldnt write 'everytime'...
Helping others to make her soul evolve didn't seem to be the solution. Bing Shi changed her plans and went against Mo Luwei head on right off the bat, and decided to go against Xuan Mu and Quin Yu, at the same time. Her soul showed signs of strengthening, but everyone knew that evolving her soul that had just evolved not a long time ago was simply... impossible. - Deehan_662yrReplied to
Whatever u write, it should not give rise to new questions or confusions... Its okay for those scenes where u want to keep the mystery, bt when u r revealing those hidden facts, it should be clear cut and logical...
Helping others to make her soul evolve didn't seem to be the solution. Bing Shi changed her plans and went against Mo Luwei head on right off the bat, and decided to go against Xuan Mu and Quin Yu, at the same time. Her soul showed signs of strengthening, but everyone knew that evolving her soul that had just evolved not a long time ago was simply... impossible. - Deehan_662yrReplied to
everytime she rcvd damage from Guan Fei* Bing Shi rcvd the blow when she killed Guan Fei...right?
Helping others to make her soul evolve didn't seem to be the solution. Bing Shi changed her plans and went against Mo Luwei head on right off the bat, and decided to go against Xuan Mu and Quin Yu, at the same time. Her soul showed signs of strengthening, but everyone knew that evolving her soul that had just evolved not a long time ago was simply... impossible. - Deehan_662yrReplied to ChubbyLiv
My wife never gave up pushing ..................by saving Aoi Hong's killer... this line doesnt match the meaning u wanted to convey...
'Woman, if you knew it was because my wife didn't give up on pushing the mafia boss against her own husband by helping Aoi Hong's killer, you would never ask why.' The corner of Xuan Mu's lips lifted into a half-smile, answering everyone's questions with one sentence, "To feed her to my wife." - Deehan_662yrReplied to
😐 I really dnt understand why Bing Shi did so many things... To evolve her soul? The ending of this ARC was confusing...
'Woman, if you knew it was because my wife didn't give up on pushing the mafia boss against her own husband by helping Aoi Hong's killer, you would never ask why.' The corner of Xuan Mu's lips lifted into a half-smile, answering everyone's questions with one sentence, "To feed her to my wife." - Deehan_662yrReplied to ChubbyLiv
What did he mean?!
'Woman, if you knew it was because my wife didn't give up on pushing the mafia boss against her own husband by helping Aoi Hong's killer, you would never ask why.' The corner of Xuan Mu's lips lifted into a half-smile, answering everyone's questions with one sentence, "To feed her to my wife." - Deehan_662yrCommented
?!?
'Woman, if you knew it was because my wife didn't give up on pushing the mafia boss against her own husband by helping Aoi Hong's killer, you would never ask why.' The corner of Xuan Mu's lips lifted into a half-smile, answering everyone's questions with one sentence, "To feed her to my wife." - Deehan_662yrCommented
Its so contradicting... Her soul evolved after her last mission, thats why her presence was so strong... Bt now u r saying her soul is weakened to the point of shattering bcz of Xuan Mu's ex soul... Evolving and weakening at the same time is so contradictory...
Helping others to make her soul evolve didn't seem to be the solution. Bing Shi changed her plans and went against Mo Luwei head on right off the bat, and decided to go against Xuan Mu and Quin Yu, at the same time. Her soul showed signs of strengthening, but everyone knew that evolving her soul that had just evolved not a long time ago was simply... impossible. - Deehan_662yrReplied to ChubbyLiv
How did it break now??
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How did the bond break? bcz of Fei Lans death? I think u should describe this thing called soul bond, why did it break now? In their previous lives Bai Meili choose someone else... So, why should Xuan Mu suffer bcz of this so called bond... Bing Shi also has her soulmate... Bt why didnt she suffer!?
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What happened?! 🧐
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I see... What about the message part? And delaying the time part?!
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plz explain... 😐🙂 #Author...
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