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Welcome back! ! [img=update][img=update]

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Water and ice brushes <3

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Isnt this suppose to be POV because its stands for point of view?

Sorry could somone remind me what convert did again? Turn his physical attacks long range as well?

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I personally want a new story, just because i hate abeupt endings, a more cohesive story would feel better to read, but pls keep the malamar, i liked it on the team

Haha i like the concept of the story so far, but i have a few comments, about the powers, the overpowered mc is a trope many like but problem with these types of mc's where you overload them with skills from different anime you want is that they end up becoming redundant. There is nothing wrong with making them op from the start, in fact i enjoy those sometimes, but maybe for a future story idea, try focusing on one concept like "what type of fighter he or she is going to be" Do i want my character to be a mage type, support type, or frontline type, or even a combination." Then you can decide "okay i want him to be mulit elemental or, he is has special eyes." this gives the character structure instead of putting andom skills together because they are op. It gives your character an identity. This makes the character feel just a tad more realistic (its fantasy-esk realistic but you know what i mean), and less cluttered if you are to make a status like screen. Another way to improve is maybe the possibility of skill merge, just to clean the status up (dont mind this i have ocd hahaha)Another problem with too many skills is that they end up being used once every 7 or so chapters, unless it is a really good skill, then why not make the character around that specific skill. There is nothing wrong with a jack of all trades master of none, because it makes the character more versatile and tool boxy, but when even you cant remember what skills he has it might be a problem.Thats all, i just wanted to give some criticism for any future novels, finding good gay fantasy fanfiction is hard HAHAHAH

Welcome back, thanks for the new chapters

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I like the current title

Oooh the updates have resumed?