theychimirollin
I'm Chimi. Shy but likes to write, watch anime, and play video games
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Aye. My willpower was weak too when I wrote this XD
Great job! Celestial beings' interactions with our world always pique my interest. The first chapter was very interesting but as the story went on, and though progressing, it felt a little lost. I hope this comes off as advice to a fellow author but maybe instead of a direct showcase of skills, maybe Liam could be placed in harsher situations where he does learn and use his newfound powers. But maybe that's just me. That said, it was an enjoyable read and it will stay in my collection because I'm curious of Liam's journey and the author's progress as well. You're doing great. Keep it up and keep writing! :)
Aye-oh!
Thank you! I appreciate the advice and I'll definitely do that! I've been planning to spend a day of proofreading the whole novel soon. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. It means a lot to me. Even I was caught unaware of how much I liked the characters lol. I hope to do my best writing on. Thank you again! :)
Nakalibre xD
I couldn't resist xD
Thank you for the kind words. It really means a lot. I was working on the third one-shot but it'll be slower than usual because I'm working on a entirely new novel for the current contest. Hopefully, I can manage so I can finally write the main story. To be honest, I was anxious to see how readers would receive this style of narration. I really appreciate your constructive thoughts about it and I hope I can lessen the confusion in the future. I wish italics were available to us authors. Thoughts would be more obvious and other writing forms could be applied. Thank you again and I wish you the best in your novel as well! (am excited for chapter 4 lol)
Awesome read! There's only three chapters so far but the world and the characters are beautifully painted (or war-painted). I'm a sucker for wars on paper, both steel-armed and political. And I can't wait to get to the latter. Also excited on what will become of Cornelius and Commodus. Only reason I didn't give full marks was the shifting tenses. But that can be easily remedied. I'd suggest to pick one and stick to it throughout. It's minor though and only slightly took me away from the fantasy. I hope this comment doesn't come off as harsh criticism but as fellow advice from a fellow author to another. Advice aside, this story was a breath of fresh air. I'd done some review swaps but I like your story the most so far. I'll put your story in my collection, not for the sake of it but because I'm already invested in where the author will take me. Kudos to you and keep up the great work! **: Haven't played Total War yet but because of your story, I might just give it a go :)
Thank you, Camille! I'm happy that you wanted more out of the story too. Hopefully, I'll be able to do that when I start on the main story. But yeah, I'd really like to commission an artist when I can. If you want another peek into the world, the second one-shot is already published and focused on a different race, the Fellden. It's called Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room. Currently working on the third one-shot :) *edited because typo lol
It will be revealed when the main story comes up :)
Yep! Dana can change form. She has the power of a doppleganger
It will be revealed when the main story comes up :)
I haven't entered any realm of werewolves since Teen Wolf but I'm glad your book was my reintroduction. The flow was nice and so was the setting. The sparks of chemistry between Valencia and Dominic was very entertaining. I'll add it to my collection too. Keep up the good work!
Hi and awesome job! I've only read a few chapters so far but I can't wait to go deeper into the story. I found the pace and build up refreshing for the genre. I'll add to my collection because I'm sure there's more in store for Mael's journey! Thank you for the swap and good luck as well with your work!