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theychimirollin

theychimirollin

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I'm Chimi. Shy but likes to write, watch anime, and play video games

2020-09-25 JoinedPhilippines
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Posted

    Awesome work! It's very well-written and the words just take you. The detail and relationships between characters weren't skimped out on. I'm a huge fan of the fight scenes and I've become a fan of the author as well. Kudos and keep it up! :)

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    City of Vengeance
    Martial Arts · Easy_Tiger
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to Wappak

    Didn't plan on making him that way when I chose the name hahaha

    Ch 10 First Battle
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    Slayer: A Song of Spite
    Fantasy Romance · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to Wappak

    Aye. My willpower was weak too when I wrote this XD

    "Oh god." Maya pressed her mouth on her shoulder. She dared not laugh. She recalled a scene from a movie about undercover cops. With strained willpower to respect the man's final words, she bit her lip until it bled.
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    Slayer: A Song of Spite
    Fantasy Romance · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Posted

    Great job! Celestial beings' interactions with our world always pique my interest. The first chapter was very interesting but as the story went on, and though progressing, it felt a little lost. I hope this comes off as advice to a fellow author but maybe instead of a direct showcase of skills, maybe Liam could be placed in harsher situations where he does learn and use his newfound powers. But maybe that's just me. That said, it was an enjoyable read and it will stay in my collection because I'm curious of Liam's journey and the author's progress as well. You're doing great. Keep it up and keep writing! :)

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    Book of Legends: Demonyo
    Fantasy · MikruZero
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to Wappak

    Aye-oh!

    Maya bowed again before she claimed her earnings. The hat was heavy and the coins clinked like rain. But hearing the audience chant out loud, Maya realized her blunder. Away from the crowd's eyes, she turned and shouted at herself, "DAMN IT! I MADE THEM CHANT THAT WOMAN'S NAME!"
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    Slayer: A Song of Spite
    Fantasy Romance · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to SacredDream

    Thank you! I appreciate the advice and I'll definitely do that! I've been planning to spend a day of proofreading the whole novel soon. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. It means a lot to me. Even I was caught unaware of how much I liked the characters lol. I hope to do my best writing on. Thank you again! :)

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    Slayer: A Song of Spite
    Fantasy Romance · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to Easy_Tiger

    Thank you! Really glad you enoyed it, especially the humor. I usually write fantasy but like Maya on foreign land, this is my first story with comedy as a centered genre. I'll do my best to keep both humor and story going. :)

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    Slayer: A Song of Spite
    Fantasy Romance · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Commented

    Nakalibre xD

    "That dickhead left without even dropping me at the right place. Well, at least he forgot the pay hehe." Liam snickered.
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    Book of Legends: Demonyo
    Fantasy · MikruZero
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to mumblegumballs

    I couldn't resist xD

    Was it a trick by the production crew? Was this the audition itself? In any case, she figured the panel of people definitely had their eyes on her. She felt their judgy gaze and how silently expectant they were. This was the trial. It had to be and she had to pull this off with grace and poise. She lifted her head, gently knocked her head with a cat's curl of a fist, and, with a wink, stuck out her tongue, "Teehee!"
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    Slayer: A Song of Spite
    Fantasy Romance · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Posted

    Great job! I like the pace and how Travia is more understood as the story goes. Maybe proofreading or reading what you've written aloud could help. There's room for improvement on the technical side but there's a lot of potential in the story. Keep it up and keep writing! :)

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    TALE OF SUPARDS
    Fantasy Romance · sam_8896
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to MultiGunner

    Thank you for the kind words. It really means a lot. I was working on the third one-shot but it'll be slower than usual because I'm working on a entirely new novel for the current contest. Hopefully, I can manage so I can finally write the main story. To be honest, I was anxious to see how readers would receive this style of narration. I really appreciate your constructive thoughts about it and I hope I can lessen the confusion in the future. I wish italics were available to us authors. Thoughts would be more obvious and other writing forms could be applied. Thank you again and I wish you the best in your novel as well! (am excited for chapter 4 lol)

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    Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room
    Fantasy · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Posted

    Awesome read! There's only three chapters so far but the world and the characters are beautifully painted (or war-painted). I'm a sucker for wars on paper, both steel-armed and political. And I can't wait to get to the latter. Also excited on what will become of Cornelius and Commodus. Only reason I didn't give full marks was the shifting tenses. But that can be easily remedied. I'd suggest to pick one and stick to it throughout. It's minor though and only slightly took me away from the fantasy. I hope this comment doesn't come off as harsh criticism but as fellow advice from a fellow author to another. Advice aside, this story was a breath of fresh air. I'd done some review swaps but I like your story the most so far. I'll put your story in my collection, not for the sake of it but because I'm already invested in where the author will take me. Kudos to you and keep up the great work! **: Haven't played Total War yet but because of your story, I might just give it a go :)

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    Crown of a Thorn King
    War&Military · MultiGunner
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to Masapodrida26

    Thank you! That means a lot to me that it wasn't a difficult read. A few of the characters will be more fleshed out in the main story. If you're interested, the second one-shot is up and it's focused on a different race, the Fellden. It's called Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room :)

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    Killing Kei: Shotgun from the Sky
    Fantasy · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to SillyRaven

    Thank you again, SillyRaven! Yep, character backstories and peeks into the involved races of the world. Currently working on the third one-shot and it revolves around the Err-Thak. Hope you'll have the time to read that too :)

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    Killing Kei: Shotgun from the Sky
    Fantasy · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to camillereads

    Thank you, Camille! I'm happy that you wanted more out of the story too. Hopefully, I'll be able to do that when I start on the main story. But yeah, I'd really like to commission an artist when I can. If you want another peek into the world, the second one-shot is already published and focused on a different race, the Fellden. It's called Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room. Currently working on the third one-shot :) *edited because typo lol

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    Killing Kei: Shotgun from the Sky
    Fantasy · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to butterkate888

    It will be revealed when the main story comes up :)

    Fletcher saw his reflection. He could see past the tint of his visor and saw his burnt face. He didn't want to look anymore but something changed. His silver eyes widened. From Fletcher's view, the dagger blocked half of Dana's face and the other half reflected on the dagger was a man with golden hair.
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    Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room
    Fantasy · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to butterkate888

    Yep! Dana can change form. She has the power of a doppleganger

    Fletcher looked at the lightbulb and chuckled as he shook his head. "You know what's funny? Remember Theo? The truth was that he burned to a crisp because he forgot to latch his helmet. He tripped. That's it. And as for my father… That was a little more complicated. Dana knew what went down all along. The golems. The shit talking behind our backs. The beatings. She planned it all to get… me. She took the form of my dad and threatened Heath to uncover what he was cooking."
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    Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room
    Fantasy · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Replied to butterkate888

    It will be revealed when the main story comes up :)

    Fletcher leaned his face close to the man's beaten face. His crimson eyes were large and steady like the pools of blood on the floor. He smiled, a twisted smile between horror and pleasure, then spoke, "One last dance, buddy... Where the hell is Kei?"
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    Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room
    Fantasy · theychimirollin
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Posted

    I haven't entered any realm of werewolves since Teen Wolf but I'm glad your book was my reintroduction. The flow was nice and so was the setting. The sparks of chemistry between Valencia and Dominic was very entertaining. I'll add it to my collection too. Keep up the good work!

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    The Undead Alpha
    Fantasy Romance · Ana_musings
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  • theychimirollin
    theychimirollin2mth
    Posted

    Hi and awesome job! I've only read a few chapters so far but I can't wait to go deeper into the story. I found the pace and build up refreshing for the genre. I'll add to my collection because I'm sure there's more in store for Mael's journey! Thank you for the swap and good luck as well with your work!

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    Lumia: Other World
    Fantasy · Mel_Aniv
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