Awesome so far. Cant wait to read what happens next!

Please just 1. They are always the best stories where it’s only two people with genuine love for each other. Would be a much more compelling story line than the others

+1

I really hope redemption is planned. Villains become so boring quickly.

Can i ask, why he shares everything freely? Seems like a risk?

Awesome story so far!! Definetely worth the read.

Jon is an idiot, he should take responsibility instead of running from it

I hope to see the development of all his worlds. Would be cool.

Thx for another awesome chapter!!

Seriously when did Peter become the villain? He is No longer a hero, he acts without autority and is needlessly cruel? And please someone give him an actual fight he has to overcome. He is almost a god right now with his strength.. there is No Challenge to overcome.

This is sooo good!!

Peter has become so powerful he appears to become a villain. I really hope he will struggle against a worthy adversary. Everything is just so easy for him.

Not sure yet if i am a fan of the changed personalities. Seems off.

Appreciate your take, its my first ever time writing. I Think i will continue it, and when the first portion of the story is complete then go back and clean it up.

Maybe, But it was always my intention to kill him. I wanted there to be a consequence for his hybris when it came to him thinking he could just mess with a horcrux. Best way to do that would be to kill something mc loves. It was sudden and unexpected.

My thought on it was that he is an adult, and as such has an easier time to rationalize the loss.

You Can still experience accidental magic even though you Can do some magics. He is still new to magic as a whole.

Sorry you feel like that, it is meant to bring in some actual consequences for the mc. But i hope you will Pick it up again.

I am new to writing, but the bit about the ROR was meant to be a bit all over the place to give the impression of the horcrux affecting Thomas.

Im sorry you feel like that. The OC (Alan Knott), is indeed immensely powerful, and for a very good reason, I have already planned out who he is, and why he is how he is. But that will come much later in the story after Hogwarts timeline why he is that powerful. Also, I personally disliked the fact that destorying something so dark and powerful as a Horcrux was always so easy, a bit of fire, or a magical sword and thats that. Nothing else, no consequences or anything. And the very reason he did not just let it go, was the compulsion charms that were put on it. That combined with the dark nature of it, and its original purpose to affect the mind made it very dangerous to be near. And yes he MC does have a version of the very same in him, and no the ritual isn't forgotten. I wont say much, but remember the the blue dots? They are connected with that. Along with the Phoenix soul that reside in him. I hope that clears up some things.