Criticism constructive. The chapters Gu Xun'er I and II are copies with only a slight difference to a fanfiction of douluo dalu called the stealing the ten thousand realms. My suggestion is that, if you are going to try doing fanfics, that you don't literally copy the content of someone else. You should try to do something original on your own. It doesn't matter if in the end goes good or bad. At the very least you would be proud because this story is yours not someone else. Also, the last three chapters need some gramatic correction.

Battle through the heavens

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Thanks for the chapter. For abilities for his rings I would say, if the spirit doesn't do it by itself, to look into the destiny of others. Like a vision of the future death of a character or something like that. In combat, it could be a type of prediction/see various seconds in the future or have a vision of when you died to change the destiny. If not, then accelerate thought ×number, a passive or active ability of causing fear/paralize/sleep... to the enemies, control of souls or a realm inside of his eye.

The spirit rings are for the soul masters to continue cultivating. The soul masters have a bottelneck that they can't pass without it. It happens every 10 levels and they provide an ability that they can use instantly. The age of the ring makes the ability stronger or weaker. Normally a person can carry a determinate choice but there are exceptions. 2 yellow, 2 purple and 5 black, there are some title douluo that can have a red one in their last one but it is rare. The come from spirit beasts.

Don't rush

Can you make the MC go to douluo dalu/soul land, please?

What?

Add Xiao Wu. And if you can, continue this book in duoluo dalu 2 making the oc have a copy of himself to look after her daughter/s and the souls martials could be eyes like yuhao to rob his rings or twin spirit like now. You could too receive the martial soul absolute ice and not get the first ring from Daydream. Later when the original and the copy are gods, fusy them and receive all the powers. You can too do the other duoluo dalu 3 and 4 with copys. Please think about it because I like a lot this book and I would love to read one like this in duoluo dalu 2. And please don't drop it.

1 or 2

I have a suggestion of a world that the MC can go early on to get a lot of talents that I think are of rare or unique. Danganronpa is one of the worlds where there are a lot of different talents and if you go in the beggining of the year in hope's peak like Makoto then you can obtain them easily. There are a lot useful like art martials,swordmanship, medical, robotic, detective, analitic, liar... and the MC could enter as a student or a proffesor.

rising of the shield hero

the rising of the shield hero please

The rising of the shield hero please