maelvoid_2025

The story I'd fine so far buy the romance feels a but forced ans rushed. Like we the audience at least need to her thoughts on why she became interested in the Mc otherwise it doesn't make much sense. He also seems sure that already dating but when did it even mention reaching that state and so quickly at that. It's weird at least to me.

Is aizen his father?

This is so stupid, how else are students supposed to build a bond with their sword and gain their zanpokuto if the swords don't stay with them. Also it just make sense at all. The only way for a soul reaper to lose their swords is if they commit a crime, die, or it gets broken in battle even then once a shinigami builds a connection with the sword a piece of their soul is then contained within.(my speculation )

why does the mc need a job, no what's the point of worrying about finances as if their paying tuition when it's all covered by gotei 13. Also why is the mc hanging onto every word Aizen says without suspecting that he's being manipulated. He knows Aizen is a master manipulator but still trusts him and doesn't suspect how he knows about his learning ability. Also where's the background lore that's supposed to be at least briefly introduced upon meeting a character. Yeah bleach is a known anime but there're many who don't know much the societal structure at the soul society. In the original it's hinted that Aizen has been planning for a long time and with him already knowing kiskue (spelt it wrong)

The overall pacing doesn't exist after like the first 3 chapters everything is being rushed with no indepth character diving. it's like putting all your money into appearance but having no substance. The pacing needs to be slower and the charger shouldn't thank of everything prior as though he's reading off a laundry list of task completed. The brief tidbits info we do get isn't enough for emersion. There is no sense of the mc facing a crisis despite him being in an unfamiliar world, facing monsters he's only seen behind a screen before. The instances that are referenced are just glanced over and deeply explored. Mc does actively try and understand the world around. Great premise but execution is lacking. The story has potential.

Conversations sound to monotone. It's like there's no life in the way they speak, also where's the conflicting thoughts and feelings that can be noticed from the posture.

Damn everyone is getting sick[img=thinking] Hope you get better though.

lol gramps got pressed by a kid

with this vast change in his very essence hoopa should no longer be retricted by the bottle that once held his fate. the bottles retrictions were tailor made for hoopa or rather the prior version of him that went untainted. The current is an amalgamation of slanesh and hoppa which is and isnt hoppa. tszeech ls screwed, bro got to happy and dropped the ball.

No reault as either losing would have after effects on the tower that would be too drastic