its good

its good. i think its really good, tge pace is just perfect. not too fast not too slow. however, the main character doent do much else apart from playing and practicing so that could be better.

his monologue is weak bruh. too forced.

am not going to detail what i am thinking, bu he shouldnt have been captured. eespecially in that way. you cant lock down the speed force and they shouldn't be able to hurt him. you messed man. your logic is off in this chapter.