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Ela_Aesthete

Ela_Aesthete

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2020-09-14 JoinedPhilippines
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  • Ela_Aesthete
    Ela_Aesthete3yr
    Commented

    "Kingsman" vibe right there

    Ch 30 Underboss: Sinnerman
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    The Roleplayer
    Games · RileyPetesGeralt
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  • Ela_Aesthete
    Ela_Aesthete3yr
    Commented

    lmao

    "You can call me Mr. R."
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    The Roleplayer
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  • Ela_Aesthete
    Ela_Aesthete3yr
    Replied to Ela_Aesthete

    Don't fret much about quality tho, it's only natural. Completing a story is a huge milestone already. If you have too much on your plate, you can hire an editor to revise it for you.

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    Oblitus Regina [Forgotten Queen]
    Teen · Elise_Aigasaki
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  • Ela_Aesthete
    Ela_Aesthete3yr
    Posted

    An intriguing novel. I like the way that the plot is unique yet also relatable. Overall it's great and recommendable but I'll give it a 4.6 A few scenes were cliche and some details were unrealistic. The sentences were beautifully crafted but few subtle errors are present. For a first book, I guess that's understandable. Above all, I see improvement chapter by chapter. The more the situation escalates into another level, the more you will get immmersed into the story! Given the main character, you will surely feel as if you're in her shoes! Love, forgotten memories, friendship, assassination, deceit, I love it. Great writing quality, great character development, great stunts, great twists! And most importantly, the author's message is well-delivered. I see good things ahead of you. Keep up the good work, miss author! ^_^

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    Oblitus Regina [Forgotten Queen]
    Teen · Elise_Aigasaki
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  • Ela_Aesthete
    Ela_Aesthete3yr
    Commented

    I've noticed this for some time but I think I should point it out. If you use "did" to support the action after, the verb must be in its base form. Like so, it should be written as "Naomi, did you just manipulate us?" I'm no English geek but I hope this helps :)

    "Naomi, did you just manipulated us? Everything was planned by you, is that correct? Is it fun manipulating us? We are your friends, not your pawns!" Nike stated, moving closer to Naomi and pulling her by her collar.
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    Oblitus Regina [Forgotten Queen]
    Teen · Elise_Aigasaki
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