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Off to a great start. The worldbuilding is very interesting. I like the mutating creatures and I'm curious to see what happened to AX-10. I was a little confused at first who the MC was because of the abundance of characters, but the moment ML showed up it became very obvious. The action sequence was fun and I just hope the smut will live up to the hype. I leave a plate of cookies for author. Good job.
Sleeeeek....
I feel like you have a tendency to over-describe some things (I do that a lot too tbh). But I thought this last two lines were a good example, because it sometimes bogs down the flow of your writing. You used around 2 sentences to say her frame is strong, or not meek/not frail. Is this detail that important to emphasis with so many words? I feel like it could be done effectively with a single word. I would dedicate two sentences to describe more important details.
SLICKED!! I can't with this word!!! You know this phenomenon when something has been pointed out to you and you suddenly see it EVERYWHERE? O_O This word...Not just in your works but just in general... I can't...
Lol, I'm glad you enjoyed the play I wrote XD It was really fun, I like rhyming so much. ;3 And he's not exactly allergic to wine, alcohol is a poison so a regenerating body won't let poison effect him XD I went a little sciencey with it ^^"
I'm glad you enjoyed some of the insight into his character :3 Thanks for all the support <3
Well, this chapter mostly served to show some backstory and that he's humoring Lev more. I hope the next few of his POV shine a little bit more light on his character. Altho, grumpy kitty is pretty good.
They're so pretty aren't they??! I'm very pleased with my spontaneous purchase :D
I feel like I'm gonna steal the nickname "confused bean" and use it for Lev at some point. XD I hope you don't mind, but if you ever see it appear in the book know it's yours, lol.
I'm glad you enjoyed it. The spiritualism in these chapters is based more on Kabbalah (aka Language of Branches) than the Bible, so I was wondering if it won't be too jarring for readers. Thank you for the support! ٩(♡ε♡ )۶
Thank you for the support! I like your new avi very cute photo -^.^- Also, if you haven't had the chance to reread the rewritten first chapter, I will hint that it would be good to do so before next Monday! ;]