This is a gripping story. A page-turner. The pacing was nice and easy to follow. You can instantly feel the MC's emotion. Great job, author! Keep on writing! :) I want to read more! :)
This is an intriguing story with an MC that was waiting for something extraordinary to happen in her life. And when it did, I guess she was not that prepared for it. XD Who will be? The start of the story is good. Maybe it's just the impatient part of me... but I want to see why Breta was never normal at a first few chapters. Even just a hint about it. All in all, this is an interesting read. Good job! Keep on writing! :)
Hmm... how did they know that her brain is special? Were they stalking her?
Oh., he is also saved., XD
does this mean that they only saved Breta and not the dying boy?
I'm wondering why Breta had this much confidence.
This story has an interesting plot. The main character is good and introduced quite well. The pacing is a bit fast. Maybe it's only me but there are too many dialogues. The MC is saying everything out loud. I think there are times that we need to see what the MC is seeing and not just hear it from him. Grammar also needs to be improved. But all in all this story has potential. Keep on improving and updating!
an ability to get a glimpse of the future seemed more of a curse than a gift. you can see it but you cannot entirely change it.
This story had an intriguing start and the writing quality is great. The pacing of the story is a bit slow. But I guess it is needed for character and relationship building. You have a good story here! Keep on updating! :)
This is an interesting story about rebirth. The author writes so well that you can easily feel the main character and relate to her. I want to see how the MC will create a difference now that she had been reborn. Great job! :) Keep on updating! :)
Is this part of Leo's power? Frighten anyone he made eye contact with? I'm hoping that is the case because I don't think that this redhead will be frightened that easily. She is an assassin after all.
This story has a nice idea about people with supernatural gifts. But I think the pacing is too fast for me to follow. Too many dialogues and less explanation of what was happening around the characters. I also think that there are too many points of view. I also think that readers need to feel more with the characters. Not just because the characters said it but because they felt it. You have a nice idea., Keep on improving! :)
This story has a nice idea. But I think the pacing is too fast for me to follow and too many points of view. And do five minutes have some significance in this story? Is it their standard waiting time? Maybe it is only me but it's too long., And I think if Leo can convince the girl to talk with them, he should not have left Darren in the first place. If Darren is so important to him, why leave him in a dangerous place?