infernozeroca
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infernozeroca3yrCommentedas much capital as (singular) as many funds as (plural)
"I'm trying my best to recover as much as funds as possible, but ever since we've returned, someone has been restricting my access to all the Green's accounts."- infernozeroca3yrCommented
now that he was a force to be reckoned with
'Not now, Quinn. You don't have the time.' Truthfully, now that Quinn was forced to be reckoned with in the school, he would usually stop instances like these. He remembered what Berg of the Sunshield family had said to him. How him helping would only help temporarily; but in the case of Berg, he himself had never been in the same situation as Quinn. - infernozeroca3yrCommented
their, their's - possessive. It's their bike, the bike is their's there -location, etc - it's over there, there are times when.
Lately, the changes happening to Vorden had become more frequent. In the past, he remained in control most of the time, but thier were plenty of times recently where he needed to rely on the others for help. - infernozeroca3yrCommented
I think the word you were looking for is... humanity's
"Are you on humanities side? - infernozeroca3yrCommented
it should read either " one lay dead while another, injured, lay ready to attack. if two. if there " one lay dead, while two others, one with minor injuries, lay ready to strike or some variation
On the floor in front of Vorden was a single defeated Rattaclaw, and next to it was another one unharmed and injured. When Vorden had arrived, he had encountered a Rattaclaw out in the wild. - infernozeroca3yrCommented
you've used suddenly twice in two back to back sentences. maybe try something like "all the attention the video was getting had piqued his interest. He began reviewing the footage for authenticity. After running all his tests, the footage was real.
After watching the video, suddenly his attention had been caught. Logan immediately could tell that the video was real. He searched up the two user ID's that were in the game and then decided to look at the match information.