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Minx_99911dReplied to uzishoGrim Reaper and Four Girlfriends
Wanda was standing with a terrifyingly, blank expression...- Minx_99911dReplied to Zeke_Arkhadiaxz
Grim Reaper and Four Girlfriends
Wanda was standing with a terrifyingly, blank expression... - Minx_99911dReplied to Bradley_Jude_4956
Grim Reaper and Four Girlfriends
Wanda was standing with a terrifyingly, blank expression... - Minx_99920dReplied to Dark_KastleCh 2 2 - REVERSAL
- Minx_99921dPosted
Your writing could benefit from some grammar touch-ups; consider using tools like Grammarly or even ChatGPT for assistance. While there's a lot to explore in terms of content, the story's development feels a bit stagnant. It sticks closely to the plot, but there haven't been any significant changes since Baam's introduction. To make it more engaging, adding depth to the characters and introducing new plot elements could really elevate the narrative. Nonetheless, it's still a fun read, and I'm eagerly looking forward to seeing how it progresses. I hope to see improvements in these areas over time, as they could draw in even more viewers. If this is your first fanfic or novel, you're doing a great job! I'll definitely keep reading your stories to see how you grow as a writer. Best of luck!
- Minx_99921dCommented
+1
The Vampire Diaries + The Originals - Minx_99922dReplied to BonVoyage
HXH was out before Boruto in case u didn't know.
Without missing a beat, Rimuru's form shimmered, his limbs extending and twisting in impossible ways. He lunged forward, his sword seemingly coming from multiple directions at once, a blur of magisteel aimed at Gazel. - Minx_99922dReplied to ItzVatsal12
ngl that genuinely creepy
"The rumors about you…" She stares into my eyes and stops. A second passes with her averting her eyes away from me as she continues; guess even the frozen heart cannot stop the allure of the Love Spot. "I didn't imagine you to be like this." - Minx_99924dReplied to NeverKnowCh 10 Nindō 0010: Noticing a Discrepancy
- Minx_99927dCommented
This don't flow right. No disrespect to the author. but overall, it a good chap.
Suddenly lust and desire filled Chena's eyes as the prospect of Kuzon being their house servant salivates her. - Minx_9991mthCommented
Rick and morty
Feel free to list all your recommendations for me to write here. - Minx_9991mthReplied to Riger82_So if I seal a target, I can change the inside of the pace such as by creating permanent lava lands or storm plains.
- Minx_9991mthReplied to nicknamefrfrThe Flaxans screamed, their unintelligible language echoing across the battlefield as Mark hurried to deal with them.
- Minx_9991mthCommented
Your personal life is first and foremost and everything is second so continue what you are doing hope u can get everything right.
Maybe you've noticed that the quality of the chapter editing has dropped a lot, well, I wish I had a great excuse for that, and I do: Basically I got dumped from my house and my life is a mess, so I'm not able to edit the chapters well. - Minx_9991mthReplied to DaoistvZHdIQThe wine flask
- Minx_9992mthCommentedCh 9 Imperial Academy
- Minx_9992mthPosted
Ok let me tell u the glaring problems. it the grammar it just flows unnaturally. u can use chat GPT or Grammarly to help with that everything else is fine for now just those problems if I find anything else I will change this review and make an updated one.
This book has been deleted. - Minx_9992mthCommented"Nah id win" a voice was heard over the radio. It was a random survivor.
- Minx_9992mthPosted
Ok let go over what I think need to be changed or updated do something else when I read it jack did this jack did that, I won't say it irritating but I would like a different perspective it a fun read though just the Pov fells weird. OK now that out of the way there to many A/N that messes up the flow of the story I'm thinking it apart of the story when it not it can get irritating sometimes. writing quality is good but like I said the Pov, and A/N can sometime irritate you. I like how the character is portrayed. he also using his army knowledge quite nicely which I find refreshing because when the usually have military knowledge the author don't know how to use it. Overall, the story is good when I find some other thing u can fix I will make a new review.