Jason_Coonce

Merry Christmas! I realeased extra chapters as a gift to ev eryone

Thank you!

How so?

I really like this book so far, the first chapter immediately grips you. The characters are well written, as is the world so far. Mind you I’m 8 chapters in and there is a lot of twists and turns story wise that I’m surprised at but I'm excited to see what this book holds in store.

Oh I dont have pictures unfortunately, its from my imagination. Also if you saw it you would start going mad

Oh man, I’m sorry bro. Writing is a never ending work lol

Oh you are welcome! Glad you enjoyed it?

If that is the case I will go back and read through it, I still think that I would go back and add more to that scene. It’s pretty abrupt and could use more detail in the young kids emotions and the fact that they were getting adopted, as from what I read they had been there a long time. For them being adopted would be a huge deal and I feel like they would react a lot more than just ”oh! This guy was In a picture with my family!” We’re going home with him. If that makes sense? It’s your story my friend, if you feel I’m out of line please let me know

Do you feel as though I was too hasty or missed some things? I’ m curious as to what you think

Thank you! I really appreciate it!