This is a fantastic work of literature. It's got the kind of thought provoking themes that I very rarely see in books nowadays. Each paragraph I read makes me just want to keep reading more. I would Highly recommend checking this book out!

It's amazing how many writers miss this.

This is good so far. The Grammar needs a bit of work, but the atmosphere and inner turmoil of the character is set up excellently. Well done. Can't wait to read more!

Very good. Very good. I appreciate your style of writing and look forward to more of it!

I would reword it to be "With whom Dr. Robotnik had a struck a deal in order to create Shadow

Very well done. I enjoyed reading this chapter.

Okay yeah, the word irate didn't mean what I thought, so thanks for pointing that out!

I love how you've raised the stakes and made the world feel bigger than the main characters by sharing Ellia's backstory. This is getting better and better.

"but was to drowsy recall who they belonged to" Shouldn't it be: "Too drowsy to recall?"

"He had convinced him it wasn't a good idea" Who had convinced him? Bain? Or was it himself?

Thanks! Like you said, it's always great to get feedback especially from people who are also experienced writers!

I love the world building and the cast of characters introduced so far. I appreciate how fast the story is moving and how you aren't too worried about bringing the story to a halt for the sake of world building. It shows a lot of skill for the craft. [img=recommend]

There either needs to be a period or a Comma when it says "It was a crest(./,) Berg's Crest."

There needs to be a comma in-between blade and brandished.

I would have laid out all the details of the plan that way you create anticipation and suspense. If the reader knows what the steps are, expectations are made because then the reader is waiting to see whether or not it goes according to plan or if something goes wrong or a step was accidentally missed.

Major respect to you for putting songs in your story! I wish way more authors would do this in their stories so it's nice to see it here in yours!

Yikes! Need to fix that!

Nice! I didn't think of that!

Nice! I like how this is going in a clear direction! Can't wait to read what happens next!

Thanks, I'll keep that in mind going forward. I would have never caught that if you hadn't said something.