Also a bmg or 50 cal which can punch through tanks is only 400 m/s more then the air gun

One anyone who knows anything about weapons and considering this is his third time in the apocalypse he should. Then he would know 810m/s is the same muzzle velocity as a 308 rifle which is used to hunt large game from deer to bear. Two since this is his third time here he would not have forgot about literally the only weapon he has. This added to his previous experiences then he would have used it long before that situation happened. So the two things added up to he wouldn't have acted like someone who had no idea what he is doing since he obviously does since this is his third time. come I have seen so many stories fall because of this. So reread and think about what you write or your just going to get the jumble mess that makes sense and has no storyline, because if your character switches personalities like that then it's more like a story of two people. Which when used to describe one person can only hurt your story. I haven't read in a while and I noticed this instantly that means a lot more have seen it and probably just stopped reading instead of say something.

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

This is by far one of the best stories I have read on here. The plot is not only fun and exciting but as makes it hard to predict what will happen.

I have five stars on everything but story development the characters are great plus The actually mistakes in the writing of the story are few. However they gets one star for story development because they author clearly does not go back and check there story not for error but to make sure they aren't missing key thing that the main character clearly states they have. Also, .the author can not keep there characters accurate. I do not recommend this story for reading even if it was only read in the bathroom. Just for reference I have 7 times this has happened in the story and that is with just speed reading if you look deeper than you are sure to find more. All in all didn't waste your stone hear for a subpar story when there are actually good one out there.

You really have no understanding of your own story. You clearly state in one of the beginning chapter that Dyon has a cultivation destruction. It was also show that the pill was strong enough to deal the power of a saint easily. With that alone Dyon would have Ragnor as soon as he got close. For even if the pill couldn't stop his cultivation compete it would weaken to a point where Dyon soul could easily devour his. For if his cultivation is weakened He could not prevent Dyon from killing him. Body is the container of the soul not the amplifier meaning no matter the strength of your body it can help the soul. Only energy can but the pill takes care of that. Now I'm not saying the story is bad because it not. I'm saying that if you want to make a good story then actually put in the work to re read and understand what you write instead of just writing what sound good because that leaves you with a situation you get called out for your own stupidity.

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