Thanatos0925

Most people know stealing is wrong but I guess not everyone has the ability to think things through

I wanted to like this story so much because the premise was very interesting to me however even after giving it more chances than I should have I just cannot like it. There are two main reasons a too constantly self aware protagonist and a constant unrealistic story plot point. The protagonist is constantly referencing cliches and his “protagonist aura” which is only funny/interesting when used sparsely at best. As for the plot point they go to this academy which the uber powerful headmistress is “preparing them for the real world” but the set up of how she does that is so unrealistic I cringe every time it’s mentioned. You don’t throw people into terrible conditions and underfeed them while having just joined your academy. To actually prepare them you teach them the tools to overcome those challenges and then maybe put them in a ranked situation. The system isn’t prepping for the real world is forcing people to quit for no good reason when they haven’t even been taught how to succeed yet.

I just don’t get the reaction everyone has to this like I guess I missed some character development but there seems no way Lux would be happy practically drugging someone to sleep with him. I know he didn’t do the drugging but he still wouldn’t like it. Unless his character is vastly different from what it has been so far he also seems like he would be devastated to sleep with someone without iris and cai knowing about it at least. Plus all this happening with Valerie a sheltered child who doesn’t know what the world is like enough to be asking for this all these relationships being forced to start due to drug induced psychosis feels like a cop out and it’s disgusting to me. Who would be happy that their relationship began because they were drugged wether they wanted the relationship to happen in the first place doesn’t matter. I guess I am just disappointed the author would write basically r*pe cause that’s what this is for all parties involved including Lux none of them are in a state to consent.

First off the story is well written and has a very interesting way of being told tell. But, sigh I am sad why does every story that has a really cool premise always have a main character surrounded by tons of misunderstandings. It’s never oh they gain cool powers or a awesome patron now let’s get started they always gain a bad rep. People think poorly of them and they have to hide their abilities though admittedly sometimes for good reason. So personally I am just tired of the use of that trope if that doesn’t bother you it’s a good story so far as I have read and maybe I’ll return once I am less exhausted by the constant misunderstanding story device.

Hiding all but the first handful of chapters behind a paywall disheartening and possibly illegal. It’s a very interesting concept but looking ahead and seeing how it’s only on patreon makes not only me turn away from it but will likely turn away many readers who would have been willing to pay for a few chapters in advance. If you’re making the money you want from doing it this way good for you I suppose but a much wider audience could be reached to pay for your writing by posting it freely then charging for advanced chapters.

Hope to see it return it was such a good story, very unique as well.

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Quick add on I get that I stopped pretty early so if it truly does get better I may be convinced to pick it back up and change/delete my review.

Finished Ch.14 before review I liked the beginning and what lead to the world change but personally I just didn’t like how constantly tortured the MC was. I get bottom most rung and rising to power but he just seems so utterly useless that other than wanting revenge there doesn’t seem to be any reason for him to be chosen as a demon king candidate. There is nothing to make me want to keep reading, nothing to make me be engrossed by the MC and their story, and no promise to more power anytime soon. Besides that’s my opinion clearly you can believe differently but just know that at least for the first 14-15 chapters it’s rough to get through if it gets any better.

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