Mayemura
An avid reader with a deep passion for paranormal, fantasy and romance stories. English is not my first language but I try....
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Hello dear author. I will be very honest with you. Your story has so much potential. However, you are making your sentences way too long. A whole paragraph with no full stops. Please be mindful of punctuation marks as well as tenses. If you can edit that, I'm sure your story is a very interesting one.
Again, please Break it down. Another very very long sentence
Try breaking this sentence down .You can actually come up with up to four sentences here .
This is one very long sentence. why don't you break it down?
A five star rating from author dear. a few typos aren't enough to make me lose interest. World background and character design are on point. This is a great read. Something totally different and I will continue reading. Thank you for writing such a good story. I'm very eager to see how the whole story progresses.