I am the author of Mages of the North - a series very inspired by Naruto. I appreciate any kind of feedback that may help me with my writing.
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Not really my type of story as I find the whole "school setting" to be a little overdone, but I found it interesting enough to read two chapters before calling it quits for the sake of saving my eyes from Digital Eye Strain. All in all, it's a decent enough story with a well-thought-out protagonist. That being said, there is a fair number of spelling and grammatical errors, but I'm guessing the author's first language isn't English, so I'm willing to overlook that for the most part. Even though the picture says otherwise, I give it a 4 star.
I would recommend breaking the chapters up a little more often as long chapters like this tend to be a little...hard to read sometimes, especially for people like me whose eyes start to hurt after looking at a screen for so long. All in all, prettier decent story.
Overall, pretty decent. You do have a lot of grammatical errors you might want to go through and change, though. I have a suspicion that English isn't your native language or you're new-ish to writing, so I'll give you an easy pass on it.
Forgot to put the "H" for hear at the beginning
Is this a translation novel? As in English isn't your first language? I don't mean to be rude by saying this but whenever you use the letter - I - it should always be capitalized whenever one is referring to themselves.
The i should be capitalized It should go like this: "But I know "how did it all start?" you ask well without further ado lets begin..."
I can only assume it's from copy and pasting from Wattpad, or maybe even from my girlfriend sending me back the edits. Sometimes the novel doesn't have any spaces in it, so I have to put them in manually, but it's hard to tell where a sentence is supposed to end with a giant wall of text staring me down. Now that I've seen and been informed of these breaks in the dialogue I'll keep a sharp eye out for them,
Definitely a talented writer, that much is a given. This story starts off strong with excellent writing skills and character descriptions. Unfortunately, I'm not able to read for very long on a screen because it tends to hurt my eyes after a while, but I will definitely be coming back a couple times a week to check this story out.
Very promising story. It kind of reminds me of when I first started writing about 10 years ago haha. Not sure why, but it just gave me a nostalgic feel for some reason. I didn't read very far because reading off a screen tends to hurt my eyes after a while, but I like it so far. Thank you for reviewing some of my work as well. I've fixed most, if not all of the issues you pointed out.