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The grammar is near flawless and contains little to no error. Both the pacing and sentence flow are decent. The dialogue is excellent; it is easy to discern who the speaker. Each character carries their own presence and voice. The story development thus far is very good. It is captivating and leaves one looking for more chapters. The author has great potential and I look forward to the completion of the story.

The grammar does suffer a bit, but gets better as the chapters go on. The pacing is excellent. The sentence flow is near flawless. I’ll probably come back and study it a bit myself. The story is captivating and charming. It has the feeling of a fantasy novel while being grounded in a modern setting. The author has great potential and I look forward to the completion of the novel.

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The grammar is flawless with little to no error. Sentence and paragraph flow could be improved a bit, but that is a minor nitpick. The story is intriguing and draws one in. It has decent pace and won’t run one over with plot points nor get bogged down with descriptions of the second and fourth tree of a random mountain. Definitely worth trying at least ten chapters and thirty if one has the time. I hope the author will continue writing the story and I look forward to its completion.

Thee characters have great chemistry in this story. The author was able to give the characters their own distinct voice, which is hard for many writers to pin down. The story looks like it is about to get spicy and I look forward to how the author will develop it going forward.

The author paints an intriguing world with good descriptions of what abilities do. The story has many moving parts, and it will be interesting to see how the author manages them. There are very few grammar mistakes. Sentence flow could be improved, but that will improve as the author writes more. I look forward to the continuation of this story and hope the author will continue writing it.

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The grammar is good with almost no mistakes. The sentence flow is not the best. This makes the story a chore to read at points. I found myself skipping over some of the cultivation explanations. Nothing innovative that makes these cultivation sections worth reading. The story is well thought out. The book is generic at the beginning, but becomes an interesting read later on. I recommend the book for xianxia readers looking for a new novel. This also a decent book for those who want to get into xianxia and don’t want to start reading a 1000 chapter book. This story has nothing unique or mold-breaking that would make non-xianxia readers interested. With all that said, I personally look forward to new chapters.

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The buildup thus far is well told. The story is approaching it’s main arch. It will be fun to see what schemes and conspiracies unfold. The sentence flow is decent and matches the pace of the chapters. The story is easy to read as a result. The writing does suffer from some basic grammar mistakes. These mistakes will become obvious as you continue reading and writing. I look forward to how the story progresses. Keep writing and you will improve with time. You have storytelling talent and I hope you continue the novel.

The grammar is flawless. I would need to major in English to find some flaw here. The sentence flow is great. Sentence flow improves the readability of the story and it shows here. It cannot be understated that the chapters here are beautifully written. They could belong in a grammar textbook. The plot is where the story falls short. The story is linear and the events are predictable. Readers familiar with the setting and genre could say that they read this story before. In later chapters, I would like to see the author to dive into more intricate schemes or conspiracies. Complex long term villains. Shady allies and tentative alliances. There are also the moral dilemmas that come with great power. The author has great writing talent and I look forward to the later chapters and their future works.

The author throws the reader into the heart of the action. No background or exposition were necessarily given at the beginning of the story. It was a quick recap and done. A rushed introduction is not a bad thing and this novel has the potential to pull it off. The novel could benefit from a slower pace. (Do note that this is a hard thing to do. You get better at pacing as you write more.) The grammar is decent, but there are no jarring mistakes. The author has talent and I hope they continue writing.

The author has good sentence flow. Good sentence flow greatly improves the readability of a work and it shows here. The inner monologue is well placed within the writing. The work has no obvious grammar mistakes. I look forward to future chapters.

The story is quick from the start and throws the reader into the action. The protagonist has a fun personality and is one of the strengths of the story. It contains few grammar mistakes. This story has great potential and I look forward to future chapters.

The story can be confusing when it jumps from scene to scene with large time skips in between. That said, the story is compelling and the characters are well made. The grammar is good and has little errors. The story has potential and I hope the author continues it.

The dialogue is great and is well written. Even without dialogue tags, it is easy to tell who is talking. [Insert obligatory grammar snark here.] The author has talent writing. The story will improve greatly with some grammar improvements and longer chapters.

Its just something I put in my reviews to mention that grammar mistakes are present . I don’t like nitpicking grammar since the story is more valuable. Grammar improves as you read and write more so don’t worry too much about it.

This book is fun and is a good read for the first 160ish chapters. Unfortunately, the story starts dragging past the halfway mark but it is still worth the finish. Grammer is good and the dialogue is easy to follow.