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    Ok i am reading this the second time now and i felt some thing like its not right,i felt rachel(sorry i don't remember the spelling)was being a gold diggeror the writer wanted to show us the luxuries ramphiere family had got in their pockets. There were grammar mistakes and some dumb errors., like from chapter 1, cat says she had just recovered but she is wearing plasters and bandage(lol)the names were pretty much interesting and i am telling she must have done some research on luxurious life before writing this. Somewhere it felt like i was reading a book of J M Barlog(pretty much standard)and sometimes like a story written by a child. The story became.getting more intense from the second or third chapter.Over all conclusion it is a great novel but can be perfect if The writer keeps a better editor(or an editor if its a single person's effort)and some readers who can give a bit of idea from what they felt, after a few changes( if the first reader have asked for )the writer should make it for public so thatthe writer can improve(think it got pretty big 👆) -Great work

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