Nakpin

I like that he got hurt pretty badly, settles that while he is super overpowered he still isn’t invincible. Obviously his power lets him get stronger but I enjoy where he’s at right now. Strong enough to be by far the strongest, but still not an instant victory when the battles reach a certain body count.

240 isn’t even that big at that height. I mean it isn’t small obviously but I feel like you’d be imagining him bigger than that to more fit the superhuman attributes he has. You can Google images of heights and weights for better reference if you think it’s needed, but when you get to well over 6’ it takes some weight to look big.

Maybe a repeat of the scene when he let Freya see his soul? Where shes ready for a 9/10 and he just blasts what she thought was possible out of possibility? Not really an important scene but something I’d like to see. Generally I’d enjoy this arc if it had lots of moments like that, that aren’t serious or dramatic, just his efforts showing through in the happy moments that he went through so much to get to. Anyways, good chapter.

I think tomorrow would become “..on the morrow” if done properly, so Im pretty sure the language is still off. I cant remember ever reading Morrow as a standalone word.

Did he leave the helmet he took off?

When is the “5 years until I leave” in relation to the 12 year doom timeline? I’m assuming he’s leaving just before the doom, but I dont think the doom was only 5 years away yet. I could be misremembering but a reminder would be nice.

I dont get the end, wasn’t Bonney just left on the island?

+1

I don’t like the skill to control his body size. I feel like it’s gonna be an avenue towards keeping him at a reasonable height, and I’m sick of every one piece fic refusing to have characters at the heights that canon characters reach. Seems like everyone avoids having their mc grow beyond normal human limits.