I really like this novel. Almost a reference harem. Cultivation and other activities of Su Yan are well-diluted with each other. I don't like the slow development of relationships with some of the girls, but that's my problem.
Not a bad start, but please edit the text. Punctuation specifically suffers, some commas at the end of the sentence, etc. And Eli's temperament is extremely unbalanced, she is somehow strange, as if the harmons are naughty.