Jamie_Finley
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i love the story line and the characters, they are very realistic. I mo invested and a can't wait to find out what happens! Great job! The only thing it needs is a good proofreading, for the grammatical errors, also sometimes it's a little hard to understand who's talking and you also bounce around from first person to third person, but that's something you can fix easily! Great job! You've written a wonderful book! I an definitely a fan of yours!!!
I absolutely love your story line! And Your characters are amazing and descriptive, you really painted a clear picture of them in my mind and I really like most of their interactions. I think you need to go back, proofread your story and make some corrections, but I understand that takes time. Don't let that discourage you, it is a truly wonderful story! Great Job!!!