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i guess that no one is more entusiastic about it than Brazilian fans. The passion we feel and the pression suffered by players who plays in big teams or who represents Brazil is terrifying, really.
Thanks for the chap, author. I liked that you put a reason for the black uniform woman to choose a key fragment. It's just worrying that shw will know where Kai is, right? I dont know if this is a big problem, BUT, what will stop her from going after him in the forest ow something like that? Another thing: Each wave has about how many Ascenders? 500 milions right? Thats a lot of people, all of them are in the same city in the Tutorial with the same missions? If someone choose the Hard difficult for some reason, just 1 can kill the bosses right? So just one can pass the tutorial? If they are divided in different citys with different missions what ensure that the 3° key fragment will be in the same Tutorial that Kai?
Overall, after 56 chaps, is a good novel, with a nice writing quality and charismatics characters. MC is a nice and clever one, so if u hate stupid MCs, u can read this without fear. World Building is almost nonexistent but until now it didnt make the story confusing and u dont feel that things dont make sense in most part of it. Its promising and i hoping that it just get better and better.
Now that i catch up. First, thanks and congrats for the hard and good work author. Second i liked this story overall, its well writen, it has good characters, and it make us want to know what is going to happen. This thing about hiding the true power is not my cup of tea, but if it has a good motivation and a time expiration to the hiding, i can accept. But the thing about the organization hunting systens, it just didnt add anything good to the story, until now at least. I liked all the familiar drama, and i wished it could be better used, with his mother a discussion in the early chapters, both of them yelling, crying, Ralph getting his red eyes and everything. In this fight with Rin the same, something were both slam their feelings and thoughts on another. But i guess that this we still can wait for a better development, but the organization, imo, shouldnt exists.
I wanted something more intense, i dont know, maybe some truth in her face. Like him "losing" control, his eyes turning red, some yelling about how he just wanted a good mom, how he get stronger just to get attention and after all, he got a limiter because of her. I guess that all this drama is important but it could be showed to us with a discussion between him and his mother, instead he just explaning half hearted to the System.
At 2010 Neymar played in Santos. He wasnt globally famous until he went to Barcelona, at 2013
I liked, it was well written and paced. I just feel that Valera story could be telled in another way, piece by piece, in some talking with Dynamite Girl or something like that. She telling that to someone who already know it, in the middle of a confessation… It wasnt bad, but it looked artificial for me. But after that was good, natural, with a nice flow
Author, the story is awesome as always. imo, action shouldnt be the central focus, i prefer to see all strategie, schemes, and plans. What Aldrich'll do? What is hes final go? How he'll get in there? I think this is more important than fights. Youre going prety well balancing these two aspects, and you can continue in this pace. thanks for the chap and congrats for the hard work.
imo these paragraphs where u give a name to the attack/skill are just repetitive. u already described It very well in the last paragraph, doesnt need to explain again what is happening by giving a name and tell us what the skill do
Thanks and congrats for the chap. Nice reference to Father Whitebeard. This tension is awesome, Shrimp is coming, probably many will die, and Aldrich will come to save the day, nice. I hope that Mel stays okay, Adrich should have more companions like Casimir, who has free will and then can helps Aldrich where he is lacking.