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Song_ONE4mthCommentedSigh the most used cliche in fate fics, why did you all bother. Him being a troll is fanon
"Zelretch."- Song_ONE8mthCommented
This is so out of place in a cultivation novel I feel like the humor is being too forced
"What is radiation? Dammit, it's poisonous air. If you touch me, the radiation poisoning will change your DNA structure and disable your healing abilities! Some of your cells will riot and try to French-Revolution you from the inside. In short, all nutrition you have in your blood cells will nourish cancer cells and mutated DNA, turning you into a disfigured monster!" - Song_ONE8mthPosted
This should have AU in the title I wanted to see the IMPERIUM of man not a bastardized version of it, I mean the 40th millennium and all that. It doesn't really feel very 40k, I thought it was going to start at the unifications wars it could have been more interesting than a huge steamroll of empire. It can be interesting but not my cup of the tea Edit: So my review it's my own personal view don't let you be discourage to read, It's very interesting and very well writing if you are willing to give it a try
- Song_ONE1yrCommented
Jeez calling it negligence, while it may be so for the author it's a harsh word for superman who just met superboy
"I'm not his father! I only remind him of what he can't be." Superman immediately denied, defending his negligence. - Song_ONE1yrCommented
Really amazing of you to use her death as reference for where are we in the canon
"Famous actress, Victoria Cindry, dies in a tragic accident...?" I muttered as I read the article title at the top of the page, my grip unconsciously tightening over the wet paper. - Song_ONE1yrCommented
The problem with depends in the wideness of dungeon caves, but I think it's gonna work in the anime tunnels are wide enough
"They're superior weapons, that's why. Why would I want some dinky weapon suited for killing humanoids when we're facing monsters in the Dungeon?" Corwyn asked. - Song_ONE1yrCommented
This could be better if instead of telling, you show the interaction.
He picked out a cheap 'Common - Tarnished Silver Ring' that the old man had mistaken for some garbage quality ring, and an 'Uncommon - Ancient Tarnished Silver Coin' that was modified into a pendent. He got it for cheap when he pointed out that the thing was literally just a piece of old metal and neglected to mention that it was silver. - Song_ONE1yrCommented
Isn't he supposed to be a blacksmith, not sure he needs adventuring gear any time soon.
'Hmm, no. I should start using my power now. Get a set of 'utility' based civilian gear that I can use to create my foundation. Then I can slowly start setting up better and better gear for my Adventuring.' Corwyn nodded to himself. - Song_ONE1yrCommentedCh 1 Chapter One: Limbo
- Song_ONE1yrReplied to DaoistXzVSxK
Ya, I'm wondering the same it wouldn't be a bad idea.
"Ah, The Inspired Enchanter...well, I can't call you creative." The monolith flash with an irritated light. - Song_ONE1yrCommented"Everything you see here is something that marked you as a person throughout your life," Zanryuzuki replied. "The seas represent your spiritual power, which is seemingly endless. The forest represents a time in your life you were innocent and how simple things were, the city represents the part of your past life that remains with you, and the stars... they represent what you expect for your future."
- Song_ONE1yrCommentedMakarov's eyes were unreadable as he stared at me, his gaze lingering on me for what felt like an eternity. His voice was soft and quiet when he spoke. "To accept oneself is to wholly admit you are imperfect, permanently and inevitably flawed. And that that makes you beautiful."
- Song_ONE1yrCommented
Honestly, I gotta be honest while the writing looks fine, however, it isn't really a good first chapter how much time did he was in the hospital bed to ignore things like a different voice, body, and not even checking his appearance, And apparently have a meal without questioning about his body, I could understand him just waking up but in narrative it looks like a few days has passed as he spoke a few times with the nurse, There's so many convenient things for the plot that is not funny it could even be called lazy writing, anyway, I wonder how's the plot going to move from here.
Ch 1 CHAPTER 1 - Song_ONE1yrReplied to Rune_God
Yeah i thought it was a nurse too but it says doctor pov, this chapter is truly trashy in quality and it's just the first half
The doctor tried not to show it but I can see it in his eyes that he pities me for some reason which I do not understand, maybe he knew about my situation, but I feel he's hiding something bigger than that from me, something I should really know. - Song_ONE1yrCommented
Jeez, people can't be original and has to be a higher power that reincarnates their OCs, and this goes for the comedic route, nothing new, this is a bad start.
"Wow. I usually condemn cowards that resort to self-immolation and explosives to take out their enemies, but that was pretty badass," said a woman with pale, lavender-tinged white hair, matching eyes, and skin so fair it could be called luminous. Her ensemble resembled some kind of priestess outfit, but her most striking feature was the strange triangular halo hovering over her head as she tossed a piece of fluffy white popcorn into her mouth. - Song_ONE1yrCommented
When the first chapter are completely skippable it doesn't bode good for the history
I originally wanted to write a Jedi SI Avengers fic, but the problems of the MCU are too easy for a Jedi to handle. So things escalated from there over and over. The first chapter can be skipped completely without much of a problem. It is the guideline for character creation in the story. If you do read it, feel free to get some dice, roll a character using the guidelines, and see if a character like yours appears later. The character building took inspiration from Jump Chain fics but has my own personal interpretation. - Song_ONE1yrCommented
This is convenient~
Gods. Demons. Heroes. Villains. Aliens. Mad scientists. Magicians. I was in a fictional world with all of that and then some. And to make things worse, I was in the most crime-infested, low-life crawling hellhole of a city in said fictional world. - Song_ONE1yrPosted
So i've read everything available right now 16 chapters very well written there aren't many bad points to be addressed, the characters feel alive, you would expect something else of the MC but he's a knight and he shows it. The backstory is funny and fantastic written you won't feel anything out of place as the MC fits the arthurian myth. There's not really much to be reviewed though the history feels young and much to be exploited I recommended it 5/5. I hope some fgo omakes or an apocrypha omake with morded, wouldn't it be better a full blown history than omakes? it's good to dream