Thumbiko_Mkhala

what kind of shit am I reading ?

I personally don't think it will work whenever authors try to mix two different works with different lores, it ends up messy. iIwould have preferred you just create some new antagonist OCs based on twilight lore. or if you want to write about underworld just do a universe jumb using magic. anyways never say never , I will wait and see what you will cook for us

earth is the territory of humans not devil's , therefore he doesn't need their permission to be in kuoh, iIwould understand if it was the Shinto asking him to leave as he is a church member but not a she devil, they do not legally own any territory in the human world

too much salt ruins a dish, baby adding many things that seem outside of the twilight lore you will end up ruining the story. the world makeup will no longer maje sense especially if you add things that may seem outplace in the twilight world, it would have been better to just create other vampire coven that were hidden and werewolves such as the children of the moon. the underworld lore and the twilight lore can no co exist , the dynamics of the vampires and the wolves are completely different , it would have been better to just let him learn a new spell from the grimorie that allows him to travel to another world together with Rosalie either accidentally or deliberately in search of adventure or make someone activate a ritual or spell that activates a gate to another world hence transporting the protagonist's group to the other world or bring in a vampire or witch coven or lycans to the twilight world

calling for an ambulance in USA that's a death sentence for a broke boy like him. are you sure the author has been to america

I like the whole idea but AI writing is really bothering me I just can't immerse myself into the story, I can feel myself dropping it in 2 chapters

he risks becoming an obscurus, and a short life due to repressed magic

the idea and the premise is good. the use of ai to write massively lowers the quality. ai always tries to use complex words for everything and it's very repetitive. something that can be said in 5 words it will use 2 or 3 sentences saying the same thing. as a veteran fanfic reader this ruins my immersion. i have no choice but to drop it. iIwill come back when iIhave nothing to read

I feel like having mystical powers in GOT ruins it, this is not a world like marvel where super powers are normal, it's better to go with physical things like swordsmanship better physique and even knowledge

this felt stupid and unnecessary