In my opinion it is a good work since it allows to be hooked easily, the main character has his real character development, he has real reasons why he is powerful. Many people are annoyed that DxD or its main story is not specifically discussed yet but keep in mind that this is a fanfiction and therefore should not follow any canon story or something like that. Personally, I love this story and I like the quality of this author, what I like the least is that the number of chapters that the author gives slows me down, but I understand that the author has his life, his responsibility and his work already that this story is his hobby and the money it raises won't even be enough for him to live decently with this fanfiction.

Author. Why do you take that criticism as negative? The criticism they have given you is constructive criticism and with all the respect in the world they gave it to you. Learn to accept such criticism so that you improve the quality of literary works since writing is not only light but must be taken seriously and committed despite being a hobby. In addition, it is not necessary that one must compulsorily write a book to criticize a person's book. Under what argument full of fallacies is that supported? You do not need to be a book author to be critical, what if you need to have read many books and if what the user stated is true, then you have a long way to go before you are a decent writer, you are still in the range of being mediocre . Good day.

A lousy fanfic, it is not located within the mediocre. If you are looking for a good fanfic, this is not it. The only ones who may like this type of work are people who have not touched serious and well-argued books with an excellent plot behind.

Thank you very much

Thank you

This is the same previous chapter. Why are you doing it?

It is a very exaggerated figure of money knowing the poverty in the north. Fifteen hundred would be more credible.

This story is amazing. It is one of the few stories that is quite good compared to most of the material on this website. The only bad thing is the instability of the chapter updates but it is understandable since I am also a writer. I give you a lot of strength and encouragement to please continue the story. Thank you.

That love is very forced and hasty

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Treasure Planet?

Your writing, writing arguments in addition to the logic of it is pretty poor. Please improve that, I couldn't see many chapters because I didn't like it. I gave you the most optimistic rating possible.

I do not consider this type of onomatopoeia very good for describing action scenes and even more so if you lengthen them in this way. I consider that you can use other resources and try to use several, do not go down and continuously use only one in your scenes but try to mix them in the best way to give a variety and an exotic touch to the story.

I think it is better to put other literary resources than things like "speed beyond infinity". A good example is: "In a blink I dared extreme speeds." I say this because you use these types of resources in your fights and it becomes a bit repetitive and it is logically incorrect for you to go beyond something that has no end like infinity.

I suggest improving these specific fight scenes. I think there are better ways in the known literature to describe this type of scene.

The story is good and you have an excellent writing that allows me as a Hispanic to be able to read your work. Please do not include harem and do not focus on romances, it would be good a fictional story where it focuses on adventure, war, action and well if you see that their powers are good then use resources such as temporarily nerfing them, creating a war with other gods equal to the presence, etc. So far it has seemed to me a work that exceeds the average of the stories of the novel web, it continues like this and continues to improve since many fan fiction here are made by 5-year-old children with no writing ability. Thank you

For my part, I suggest that the text is not focused or related to the television program since I never liked it. I want your creativity as a writer to appreciate and make an unforgettable path here since it is your own fan fiction and also obviously, that has a lot to do with comics but for people who have not seen comics, try not to throw us such information immediately because On more than one occasion, we do not know what event it refers to or what past that character has but explain it little by little as if you were the creator of that universe. I think this is a good opportunity for you to practice creating totally new books and building the universe it revolves in.

Kuchina :v

Don't you happen to forget that this person is a powerful telepath who always invades the minds of those he knows? How are you going to protect yourself from that? Do you at least think about that before getting excited about that meeting?

I´m out