CyprianNasat
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Yes of course she was ... any mom will do that ... I guess?
Reading the short story part ... makes the story enough to grab my attention already....good use of grammar and anime -style writing style which I myself am quite familiar with....overall,I really like this style of writing and I hope you continue to write it and don't leave because it's a pity if you don't continue this good story ...so keep up your efforts and I am always behind supporting you.
Overall ... the story is good and I understand what you want to convey to the reader...you just have to correct your grammatical mistakes and the use of "he/she" because sometimes, female characters are called "he".....So I suggest you to re -read your story after writing it before publishing it here...That's all I saw through my reading earlier ... if you can correct the mistake I mention earlier I guarantee your story will be better and more interesting.
Hmm ... your writing is very simple but easy to understand for most readers whether new or old readers ...Although I haven't finished reading it yet, I think it looks interesting .... Girls who know how to fight? ... heck yeah, that my type of female leas, especially stories like this
Wow...how do you able to gain 1k only for few day?... might sharing?